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Re: Stars.

Postby Tash8 » May 24th, '09, 18:51

the singing part is awful... hook is good but mixing is just bad.. first verse is okay, you slur too much. second verse is dope...third verse is dope... i just wish you had someone else mix this for you cause the mixing is bad but everything else is dope.. work on your delivery, you slur wayyyy too much..verse 4 is bad, wtf is it even about? the whispering was horrible, didnt' fit anything else. i wish it ended after the third verse hook cause it was great up till there
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Re: Stars.

Postby B.A.D. » May 26th, '09, 03:29

I don't even know what to say

this is one of the best internet tracks I have ever heard in my life

the lyrics are beautifull.... seems like directed to someone... should be honored, this is a masterpieze

the only terrible flaw is the mixing on the hook, it sounds too low, and strangely managed

but damnz, the lyrics simply make it untopable, there are some parts where the scheme seems weird, but its all well planned... I loved it

at the second verse you strugle when starting but gets corrected real fast... also the beat choice is amazing... hmm... I can recognize the 2 deep production in this one, sick beat

man... this is amazing
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Re: Stars.

Postby gutawafang » May 26th, '09, 03:56

Skilful lyrics.
Insane music.
This shit has inspired me to do better than I used to.

Thank you man. :y:
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Re: Stars.

Postby DOPE » May 26th, '09, 11:59

i love the beat first off.

and what Ax D said basically, amazing stuff.




but this verse at the end, i dont think this was needed.

You know I often thought, what if all the dead could walk
would they even talk at all, maybe they could walk it off
maybe we could chalk it up to something in the soup
Nah forget it, go home, there's nothing we can do
Jetsons in their hover craft, never hit a bump
& they told us they'd recover that & now it's covered up
they said that we was sick man,
there's nothing we could pick man, just passing by
Stuck in all the quick-sand the artic would provide... THEY LIED
"It's amazing that the amount of news that happens in the world every day always just exactly fits the newspaper."

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Make you satanistic
Make you take the pistol to your face
N place the clip N cock it back
N let it go until your brains are rippin out your skull so bad
To sew you back would be a waste of stitches


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Re: Stars.

Postby Mr. Chambers » May 28th, '09, 22:03

honestly....i think the only flaw in this was the mixing...........so i really can't say too much else other then pretty dope.........i guess just read up more on mixing and shit if your doing your own mixing or get some1 more experienced to do it........ :y: ....stay up
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Re: Stars.

Postby TripleNineThree » May 29th, '09, 00:12

The lyrics were AMAZING, they were FRESH, you just gotta work on pronouncing some of the words a little better, the chorus I enjoyed it but I think you coulda added a little something else to make the chorus stick out if you know what I mean. The mixing needs an up on like everyone else said, but that comes with time. Once again this track was amazing! keep it up fam!
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Re: Stars.

Postby TripleNineThree » May 29th, '09, 00:23

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Re: Stars.

Postby Xray » Jun 1st, '09, 06:11

DAMN that beat is crazy as fuck, love it. Delivery was good, flow was dope, so was the lyrics, I didn't care much for the mixing cause I liked the song as it is. Definitely a step up towards flow, good work on that. The last chorus sounded weird though, not sure why, but it did. Other than that, good shit. Btw my feed is based on the new version.
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Re: Stars.

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jun 1st, '09, 11:06

man ,, beat is fucking amazing ,, i adore it ,, it's sick,, lyrics are good , it's the 1st time i heard you but you amaze me ,, flow and delivery were dope ... you lack nothin ,, it's a sick track ,, mixing is not good , but still it's a good song ,, man ,, 8.5/10 ,, keep it up :y:
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Re: Stars.

Postby Tornado » Jun 1st, '09, 11:24

wow, some deep and complex lyrics here bro, shit took me a bit to understand. Overall it was good, felt yu have had better delivery but the mixing istill the weak point in the track, but nice to hear some new talent in Tr

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Re: Stars.

Postby Drama Setter » Jun 1st, '09, 11:51

Nice bro , The rhyme Was great But U need to Work in a better Studio Man , The Quality was not very Good but Overall It was very dope , thx . Waiting For ur next products. :y:
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Re: Stars.

Postby <Stiiccy> » Jun 2nd, '09, 23:02

It was okay I guess..nothing special

Mixing fucking sucked...and delivery was mediocre but other then that it was okay...

Flow and lyrics were top notch tho
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