WarZone

[MC Anonymous]

http://www.zshare.net/audio/6102177778c3e199/

Made this for practice on flow/delivery, will do a couple more of these tracks before I start with my album. Gotta get the rust off ya know?

LYRICS
In the battlefield with chariot wheels
I got a pair of the steal, scare and steal
blast and hair really peels
refill bestill the clips in your ribs
drippin with sids, wake when I shaken ya kids
awaken from this, I'm tired when I'm runnin' and gunnin
see nothin but somthin told me to keep runnin
hearts pumpin with the rage
start bustin' like a mage
caught trustin in this age
brought nothin' but a cage
I'm enraged encaged my feet is in a sprint
bars on service purpose in blood prints
bloody footprints warzone paint on my face
indian spittin when rain falls on my mace
with the microphone I guide wide eyed
by right sides ghts drive death in high tides
In the chariot, a patriot
bangin' when I start spraying shit
grazing hits no explaining this
pain in spit isn't gaining shit
warrior, torture the cornea with a horror
this invision of death to our people when we are cornered
swords clashin stabbin adomens, grip javelins
battle men, grip your might and dismantle them
where we are going we will die tonight
bring spirits really high when we spill dynamite
as we bomb all these fuckers we're disgracin our name
I'd rather live infamous then live a life inside fame
grip the flames and exterminate,
ignition is burning late, turning fate,
deterimend hate is really fuckin' served on plates
I'm about to lose my mind, bruise my eyes
all these bombs around me, why can't I choose to die
I can't stand these demons, can't hand my legions
over to the enemies, I'll be banned for teason
Gunshots, the fun stops, blast and nuns drop
naughtical knots, arial strikes, trap your run spots
I'm scared, I don't wanna die----- .....

[B.A.D.]

now this is crazy

lyrical =

on the writing you got no problem at all, sick amazing rhymes

on the mixing you need to play a little bit more with it, and get a unique delivery, cuz even if the flow is perfect and the lyrics are genious you need to convince the listeners that you feel it with a stronger delivery, kind of like how u did in "magic"

[Solace]

Really dope man, only problem was the weak delivery but i really enjoyed this track. Keep at it. Suprised at you flowing for so long and well.

[MC Anonymous]

now this is crazy

lyrical =

on the writing you got no problem at all, sick amazing rhymes

on the mixing you need to play a little bit more with it, and get a unique delivery, cuz even if the flow is perfect and the lyrics are genious you need to convince the listeners that you feel it with a stronger delivery, kind of like how u did in "magic"

Thanks for the feed bro I'll try to improve my delivery more on my next track

[MC Anonymous]

Really dope man, only problem was the weak delivery but i really enjoyed this track. Keep at it. Suprised at you flowing for so long and well.

Thanks bro

[MC Anonymous]

Bump for feed. I need it to improve.

[MC Anonymous]

Bump for feed. I need it to improve.

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

here it goes...
pronouncation is way better...plus your delievery seems constant on this....
your flow struggles due the long verse...like the way you wanted to switch up flow didnt really work smoothly enough..like you could work on transitions between flow switches get me?...but for now focus on your main rapping...
other than that lil unimportant flaw i have nuttin else to say...
good track once again you heading the right direction...

[MC Anonymous]

here it goes...
pronouncation is way better...plus your delievery seems constant on this....
your flow struggles due the long verse...like the way you wanted to switch up flow didnt really work smoothly enough..like you could work on transitions between flow switches get me?...but for now focus on your main rapping...
other than that lil unimportant flaw i have nuttin else to say...
good track once again you heading the right direction...

Thanks bro! I keep on working thanks to your constructiveness and others. Without it I'd be nothing

[_Ironic_]

yeah, dude. hands down this is the best track I've heard on this site yet...your multies were nasty..delivery was WAY above average..but still not great...naw mean?

you used a few punchin's in this...and it definitely elevated the flow and made this track's quality imo.

I'd have to give this 10/10..no joke man, u did your damn thing on this..keep droppin that nastyness!

[MC Anonymous]

yeah, dude. hands down this is the best track I've heard on this site yet...your multies were nasty..delivery was WAY above average..but still not great...naw mean?

you used a few punchin's in this...and it definitely elevated the flow and made this track's quality imo.

I'd have to give this 10/10..no joke man, u did your damn thing on this..keep droppin that nastyness!

Thanks bro!!! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'm trying very hard to increase my delivery also.

[randomghost]

nice beat....i can feel the vibe of this track...flow is good..not bad...delviery is ok...mixing and mastering is really bad didnt like it...good track...lyrics is good...keep it up

[DelinQuent]

flow is good for the most part, much better than normal.

lyrics are sick, as usual, you have a knack for writing.

there's not much to say, because there's not much to complain about. you NEED to do overlays though, this would have been WAYYYYY more entertaining with them.

[Solace]

flow is good for the most part, much better than normal.

lyrics are sick, as usual, you have a knack for writing.

there's not much to say, because there's not much to complain about. you NEED to do overlays though, this would have been WAYYYYY more entertaining with them.

Agree about the overlays, sometimes your tracks Anon just feel a little to empty without them. Just keep trying them, I don't care if you think you'll do them off

[Requiem]

wow, really great job with this man. great flow, and pronunciation was perfect. only thing i have to say is step up delivery, but thats minor considering it's a new mic, and u'll learn how to work with it as time goes on.

nice man, i like to see this kind of level from u