Evil

[MC Anonymous]

Something quick I whipped up =D

http://www.zshare.net/audio/61930602608456cb/

intensity bending me, sending this energy
readily blast steadly aint getting me
grapple MC's with pyschosis, know this
blow this, flow it, can't rhyme ya slow shit
better notice, I don't give a fuck, lift and buck
you try to drive away but your fuckin' shift is stuck
nip & tuck cause you biting lines like a stapler
make your bitch run around in circles like I'm chasing her
no escaping the tortous porche spit
throw you in the fucking air, I'll torch the shit
of course I'm sick, cryptic lyrics cripple ya spirits
triple the digits, simple I'm in it to win it with sentence
your finish and I'm fuckin' thristay to curse names
mouth aint a flamethrower but I can burst flames
hurt lames with dirt stains, they in they grave
behave, don't be brave or get slain

[threeandtwenty]

your flow reminds me of JMT towards the end
delivery definately an improvement,stay rhyming fast suits you better.

[_Ironic_]

everything is cool on this except flow and delivery...you sounded WAY to forced trying to spit this verse..your pronunciation was off..and it sounded like half of you was holding back ur voice and the other half was trying to hard to make it flow good...it's not a disaster...but with a better delivery man u could do things...but ya...lyrics/multies were straight. keep doin it.

[MC Anonymous]

everything is cool on this except flow and delivery...you sounded WAY to forced trying to spit this verse..your pronunciation was off..and it sounded like half of you was holding back ur voice and the other half was trying to hard to make it flow good...it's not a disaster...but with a better delivery man u could do things...but ya...lyrics/multies were straight. keep doin it.

I agree I was a bit forced, it's because I'm trying to find my spot of what my delivery and flow should be like. It's hard because I'm 16 and my voice isn't fully developed yet. =(

If you come back to this thread, any advice? I saw how you helped C-Riz with overlays so if you can help me it'd be appreciated.

[_Ironic_]

everything is cool on this except flow and delivery...you sounded WAY to forced trying to spit this verse..your pronunciation was off..and it sounded like half of you was holding back ur voice and the other half was trying to hard to make it flow good...it's not a disaster...but with a better delivery man u could do things...but ya...lyrics/multies were straight. keep doin it.

I agree I was a bit forced, it's because I'm trying to find my spot of what my delivery and flow should be like. It's hard because I'm 16 and my voice isn't fully developed yet. =(

If you come back to this thread, any advice? I saw how you helped C-Riz with overlays so if you can help me it'd be appreciated.

try to find the harmony in your voice.. when you can say words smoothly without pitching low/high...naw mean? i know it's hard cuz of your age....but the easiest way for me to find my voice was straight up spitting my verses repeatedly in the mirror man. I grew up broke as fuck and there was NONE of my equipment..simply a boombox a pad and pen and yeah...a mirror. go back to the basics with it and find the voice that you feel COMFORTABLE with...the best kind of tracks are the delivery where it seems like you'd be talking to your friends but telling them a compelling story...if that makes any sense to you. cuz u know if your friends heard you off pitch at excitement they'd probably laugh...hope that helps.

also:
in order to flow USUALLY you can't say every adverb/adjective/ connecting words like that...you have to dumb it down a LITTLE otherwise it will make the production forced and you sound rushed. keep workin.


im thinkin bout droppin this song next: http://www.zshare.net/audio/619439393d17791c/
but this gives a peep into my passion, and how my skills progressed.

[MC Anonymous]

everything is cool on this except flow and delivery...you sounded WAY to forced trying to spit this verse..your pronunciation was off..and it sounded like half of you was holding back ur voice and the other half was trying to hard to make it flow good...it's not a disaster...but with a better delivery man u could do things...but ya...lyrics/multies were straight. keep doin it.

I agree I was a bit forced, it's because I'm trying to find my spot of what my delivery and flow should be like. It's hard because I'm 16 and my voice isn't fully developed yet. =(

If you come back to this thread, any advice? I saw how you helped C-Riz with overlays so if you can help me it'd be appreciated.

try to find the harmony in your voice.. when you can say words smoothly without pitching low/high...naw mean? i know it's hard cuz of your age....but the easiest way for me to find my voice was straight up spitting my verses repeatedly in the mirror man. I grew up broke as fuck and there was NONE of my equipment..simply a boombox a pad and pen and yeah...a mirror. go back to the basics with it and find the voice that you feel COMFORTABLE with...the best kind of tracks are the delivery where it seems like you'd be talking to your friends but telling them a compelling story...if that makes any sense to you. cuz u know if your friends heard you off pitch at excitement they'd probably laugh...hope that helps.

also:
in order to flow USUALLY you can't say every adverb/adjective/ connecting words like that...you have to dumb it down a LITTLE otherwise it will make the production forced and you sound rushed. keep workin.


im thinkin bout droppin this song next: http://www.zshare.net/audio/619439393d17791c/
but this gives a peep into my passion, and how my skills progressed.

Excellent job on that track bro, and thanks for the advice! We must collab soon. I agree with the flow thing. It's hard for me to dumb down my lyrics but I can try it.