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[°[~CHR!$~]°]

forever- you need to calm your flow down..like you speed it up then go slow then speed it up...find a good balance....pronouncation so far was good...delievery was there but can be improved

vtz beat- oh shit you melodic flow-pattern is fucked haha...cuz its everything but melodic haha..flow is major fucked...idk...stop and go big time....hook? was ehh good idea gone bad....

keep workin' and u get there

[enjinn]

for your first audios this is good...meaning youre going in the right direction...you know how to rhyme but you need to pace yourself better...cuz less is more...keep at it and youll be fine...what do you use to edit your vocals?...cool edit might help

[gutawafang]

Delivery could be improved. Pronounciation too. It's good man, I mean you have the stamina to rap this fast. I don't know what else to say.

[enjinn]

i think a big problem is...i dont know if its just me, cause im really inscure and all, but i dont like my voice

your voice is good...its just you have a bad mic...if you can save up you should get the shure sm58... http://pro-audio.musiciansfriend.com/pr ... sku=270101

[Drama Setter]

good but not too good you should work on your flow and the rhyme and many thing but these are your top priority