Please Lock This

[Tranquil]

Link Is Broken Sorry

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

(sorry got to get shit off my chest right now)
seriously....you got an ego problem...hyping yourself so much and nuttin behind it
hook: booooooooooring.. thats even a hook?
verse: needs more delivery and flow just kept stretching as the time went by
at least you got a good quality...but technique NEEDS to be improved

[DelinQuent]

flow needs work, a lot of work.

very simple rhymes, "father left me when i was a little boy, he obviously thought i was a fucking toy" very very basic rhyming.

the hook is extremely boring, just repeating it over and over doesn't work, especially with how bored you sound.

second verse gets no better. no improvement on the flow, nor the delivery.

overall, this song made me bored. you sound bored while recording, which makes me bored while listening. i'm not saying you need to go off and scream, i'm saying put some emphasis into what you're saying. Also, the flow needs a major amount of work, practice, practice, practice. keep at it.

[Tranquil]

Thank you guys for honest feedback, i will defently work on my flow and making myself not sound bored,