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First Recorded Rap.

Postby JBM » Oct 13th, '09, 09:05

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9ahDFPA63MY

Just looking for feedback.
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Re: First Recorded Rap.

Postby MC Anonymous » Oct 13th, '09, 11:32

''First Recorded Rap.''

I can tell. Delivery is lacking horribly. Lyrics are boring, nothing exciting, not even one bit. Your flow is non-existent, quality sucks. However, I've seen worse *points at Le Tunisien*
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Re: First Recorded Rap.

Postby enjinn » Oct 13th, '09, 23:04

i dont see anything wrong with your flow or delivery...only thing id work on are your rhymes...get more complex with it...but that will come with time...and get a better mic!...this is good for a first track...stay with it and youll be making good shit
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Re: First Recorded Rap.

Postby JBM » Oct 14th, '09, 05:04

enjinn wrote:i dont see anything wrong with your flow or delivery...only thing id work on are your rhymes...get more complex with it...but that will come with time...and get a better mic!...this is good for a first track...stay with it and youll be making good shit


Thanks. Will do.
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Re: First Recorded Rap.

Postby DelinQuent » Oct 17th, '09, 01:37

flow needs work, a lot of work.

delivery starts off decent, but it doesn't sound natural.

keep working :y:
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Re: First Recorded Rap.

Postby Element. » Oct 17th, '09, 14:35

nice
Last edited by Element. on Dec 30th, '09, 04:05, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: First Recorded Rap.

Postby Justice » Oct 17th, '09, 15:25

yo JBM, i cant seem to understand why people are sayin work on your lyrics, i was just listenin, and to me your lyrics were awesome talkin about how u aint tryin to be slim he's just an inspiration, i like how u put that part together, flow was good just needs a little more time, and delivery comes with more songs, and dam bro for your first time i'm impressed, you got talent so take your time and run with it bro

much love stay up
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Re: First Recorded Rap.

Postby JBM » Oct 17th, '09, 22:10

Thanks Justice.
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Re: First Recorded Rap.

Postby Solace » Oct 18th, '09, 04:47

Smithy wrote:http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=T5D5Sjpfh44
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Recorded,,!

Check it out NO HARSH COMMENTS
its my first rap.

Get the fuck out faggot no one asked for your tracks.

I found it funny how you (JBM) ignored MC Anonymous' feed :shifty:
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Re: First Recorded Rap.

Postby JBM » Oct 18th, '09, 06:25

Solace wrote:
Smithy wrote:http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=T5D5Sjpfh44
Smithy - Writers Block
Recorded,,!

Check it out NO HARSH COMMENTS
its my first rap.

Get the fuck out faggot no one asked for your tracks.

I found it funny how you (JBM) ignored MC Anonymous' feed :shifty:


I didn't ignore it.

If you found that funny, step outside kid. There's a huge world out there full of way more interesting things :)
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Re: First Recorded Rap.

Postby Solace » Oct 18th, '09, 22:22

:unsure: Okay.
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