Sunshine - Tash8

[Tash8]

listen:
http://www.zshare.net/audio/66954130fd7641c7/

lyrics:
good morning sunshine, it's been pouring too long
i been feeling lonely, since my first song
its the first time in a while i've been able to smile
or done something that i've felts worthwhile
and now i done learned to move on
and stopped only doing when you approved of
mimicking your views in such a way that i'd screw up
and made a big fool of, i've learned to be me
the way i see things, when i sleep
and the shit i'm eating
and bit by bit it's calmed my breathing
and now i'm feeling, a bit more alive
so good morning sunshine and stay thru the night

no, i wont let you hold me down
no, mo', ohh
I won't let you hold me down
no, mo', ohh

it's like playing chess, it's alway a game
you can't wait to say "yes I've won, checkmate"
and rub it in my face, man i love this game
but how long can i play? (play)
i just want you beside me i want you to know that
i'm not giving you up, i'm just trying to say that
you mean a lot to me, but i dont want the games back
we can just take that, and put it aside
and now i'm feeling a bit more alive
so good morning sunshinea nd stay thru my life

no, i wont let you hold me down
no, mo', ohh
I won't let you hold me down
no, mo', ohh

Oct. 31st is when I turn 18
and when will i learn the way that things
work around here? i'm trying to understand
how life works, i dunno why i can't
but i finally see what's stopping and I tell me
"noooooo oh mo'"

no, i wont let you hold me down
no, mo', ohh
I won't let you hold me down
no, mo', ohh

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

the catchyness is there...the flow is upbeat and works fine...
volume on the verses is perfect...just the hook could need a boost on that...
love the mixing sounds way too clean!!! mega propz
also the hook is mixed very well...especially the singin part...
concept is great...
what else can i point out?....your "echo attempt" at (play)-part could be more smoother...like a much reverb on the play-echo and you know....sounded cheap how it was thrown in..lol
but other than that very very VERY nice track man

[Emadyville]

This wasn't bad. Your flow was good, a little off at some parts but overall good. Your delivery was pretty good, I felt some emotion in your voice tho I thought it coulda been a little better, but again it was decent. I felt like your lyrics coulda been a little more descriptive, I think I was thrown off by the way you ended the first 2 verses like you wanted the girl (or you literally were talking about seeing the sun, brighter days or whatnot because you no longer wanted her to "hold you down") but the hook made it seem you didn't. Overall it wasn't bad, hook coulda been a little louder tho, I hope this helped

[B.A.D.]

the volume of the beat is Exageratedly high, turn the volume down ASAP, cuz it ruins the whole quality of the song, the mixin has to be either on a studio or it won't sound good like this, cuz your verse is very well cleaned, so the problem is that the beat is not mixed and too high

about the song
- the topic of the song is nice, I'm feeling it, good story, deep writings

the first verse is the best, your flow is superb on this one, , you are made for fast flowing, cuz when you turn it smooth is not as good as when you go fast

the writing structure-scheme has to be fixed cuz there are many parts in which you finish a verse with more space to go, and also some parts in when one bar is longer than the other so it makes you jump fast to the next line.

but still a great song to listen to, specially if you pay attention, great great track

oh, almost forgot... the hook... the idea is good but can be perfected, I think its mixed very well, and you do good singing, but needs a bit more I guess, i dunno, the only thing is that the beat quality turns down the hook quality

[SajN]

Beat was good, you made it? I like it.

Flow was good, but I just didn't feel it, cuz I prefer hittin the snare. But that's my taste.
Hook is not really my cup of tea.
Lyrics are very simple. Don't feel them, but they got the emotion.
Your voice is good, I feel the delivery. That and the beat is the only thing I liked.

That's my opinion

[Kez]

The beat is crazy, it's like a mix of the pop kinda stuff and hard shit. Bad description i know.

Concept is nice, lyrics are deep shit. The rhymes aren't that complex or amazing, but they still work well for the concept. Your flow is abstract as it tends to be which is good but at times sometimes it would do you good to have a bit more of a clear flow for some verses, as a personal opinion. The delivery is good and improved remembering the lack of emotion people thought was in your tracks before, has definately improved. Quality is best so far in this too, volume is good so you can hear it all clear. The singing i don't think worked though honestly lol, it was pretty low to begin with so you can barely hear it in the first place but past that it wasn't that good if i'm honest

Hope this feed is "in-depth" enough for you bitch - basically it's a good track and you are continuing to improve in terms of delivery and quality.

[Steve Spag]

Funny, I got a song titled "Sunshine" aswell, LOL.
This is pretty nice though. The lyrics are deep and they really suit the beat well. Your flow is pretty dope for the most part although sometimes it feels like you're rushing some lines. The chorus was iight, not my cup of tea but it was still good. All you need to work on is your pronunciation and a louder voice and I think you'd be set.

Good track man, I enjoyed the listen, so keep it up!

[Tash8]

Thanks a lot for the feed guys.

[enjinn]

cool song...good flow and all...lyrics were very nice...good shit

[KDEWolf]

I didnt know you where a R&B singer lol.... Naw it was good just quality issues... But u already knew i was gonna mention the quality