I Loved High School [UPDATED WITH NEW LINK]

[Tash8]

this is a personal song to my friends in high school, all of us are goiing to college now and we haven't really seen much of each other recently..

listen:
http://www.zshare.net/audio/671098125999125f/

NEW:
http://www.zshare.net/audio/672120220dc3ea11/

lyrics:
let me tell you a little story of how i became who i am
smoking too much, never given two fucks of anything worth a damn
now tell me how that sounds
and i'll tell you how it feels to relax kick back smoke a bit then
start to work on these beats
i feel like a cudi kid alone on the moon
but there's plenty of time i dunno what to do
so i think of old memories, the times of our lives
there's a night a while back, too weird to describe
but i might as well try --- Ashwin getting drunk
hitting on' every chick that walk by
and kunal ditching us to go back to his dorm
what he did that night? I guess we'll never know
the first time we got high, was back in july
scott gets mad, cause it didnt feel right
and cam oh cam, what he said that night
made us all wonder, oh my god chris
that dude when he's drunk, would always fall and trip
and that one day at camp, where we started throwing sticks
and i swear i saw tal just barely getting missed
and all the shit that happened at in n out was sick
from victor throwing up, to mario giving shit
cause we wouldn't go talk to this table full of chicks
and nadav always meeting people, he would never know
to flirting with this one chick he knows from new york
all these great times, from the narnia scare
to the days where we'd sit there bored and we'd stare
so i miss all you guys and let's see how time flies
maybe a little catching up when we all have time

[Steve Spag]

Pretty chill track dude! For real, you lyrically slaughter Ash when it comes to rhyming on this beat. Keep it up dude!

[Tash8]

Pretty chill track dude! For real, you lyrically slaughter Ash when it comes to rhyming on this beat. Keep it up dude!

thank you dude, ppl kept saying my lyrics were too simple, but they were def not simple in this... thx again

[Justice]

dudeeeeee, people sayin your rymes are simple are frikkin idiots, it aint about the simplicity of your rymes, its all about the story you tell, and this was a story song, no need to go crazy on a story track, and saying that, you slaughterd it bro

[Tash8]

thanks bro

[Justice]

ayo tash 8, you killed asher roth on his own ish maaan, am also doin a song to this but mine is a diss at asher cuz i think he is the fakest rapper alive lol but good stuff man this was dope really liked it

[Tash8]

thanks a lot...
bump

[enjinn]

great story track man...made me think about my past too...good shit

[Tash8]

thanks dude

[Xray]

Nice beat, and a cool concept. It was pretty good but the flow needs work. Choppy flow, like I can tell your struggling to keep on beat and land your rhymes on the snare. For what it was, it was a cool song, keep working on your flow though, meaning not only recording wise but writing wise to. If a track is written perfectly to a beat with the right amount of syllables then you won't have trouble recording it. When you think of a line, while hearing the beat, spit it and see how it turns out. Since your flow needs improvement, you need more words added to your lines, with the right amount of breathers you take in between. Cause right now your taking inappropriate breaths between words and its causing you to sound choppy cause you don't have enough syllables in your rhymes. So you need to focus on two things, your breathing, and your flow.

[Slim Zaddy]

i liked it , it cool ,, but flow could be better ,,

[Slimm]

Lol i actually saw the story in my head when you told all the things that happend. Cool stuff man!

[Mr. Chambers]

you got potential............but you need to tighten up the flow a lil bit brother....like slim said your very detailed...made it easier for me to paint it in my head.......

only thing i really see holding you back is your flow......if you can make it better you'll be pretty dam good......

[Tornado]

I know the kind of laid back delievery and effortless flow you were going for but honestly, i was kinda disappointed. The flow was choppy, the delievery was right, but it didn't feel you were in the groove of the beat, your lyrics lacked structure in areas so some lines didn't feel like it rhymed. That said, i do like the idea of kicking back and reminiscing on good times

[Tash8]

thanks guys

i did another version, basically focusin on flow, i know there's a lil mess up there but no worries, i was trying to focus on flow

let me know if the way i spit it here sounds good or not so i can work on it

thanks

http://www.zshare.net/audio/67204397dbb02487/