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Empire State of Mind remix

Postby Emadyville » Nov 15th, '09, 18:19

Called "New State in Mind" you can listen here:
http://www.myspace.com/ddubswinch
http://www.zshare.net/audio/6843792963862446/

Lyrics:
Yeah this in-dustry, is what I must see,
was a rough rider I started as a roughie,
I couldn’t take cattle, I jumped off the saddle,
I kept the lasso forgot about the satchel,
no more questions, I’m here to baffle,
I need a “Q” ban where the hells Castro,
where the hells she at, when I let facts-go,
if I want dome…first I need astro,
but I am directed, ipso facto,
I’m on the right course watch that map-fold,
to see what I saw, that as I hack-slow,
and go from bashful straight to an asshole,
if you wanna laugh-go, I am not fragile,
I’m moving north and I will without a hassle,
I already made it in Catty, so I’m getting out the Valley, so imagine what I will do…

I know I have skill, but this deck be partial,
I’m only dealt sluts yeah all my cards-blow,
so it’s time to go now, no more sorrow,
this “males” getting shipped D. Dubs is now a parcel,
and I love it here, but I see a farce-though,
you’d swear I wrote comics cause my rhymes marvel,
yet I can’t make it, lost all my marbles,
I don’t wear a polo but you’re all yellin Marco,
what about D. Dubs, read Todd’s article,
I’m kicking and screaming like this art turned martial,
I just wanna spit, in Catty I’d gargle,
open that port in New York now D. Dubs is the cargo,
I’m about to nest, improve my arsenal,
and do big numbers so I guess I’m a cardinal,
and now is when it starts-yo, never will my heart-slow and that’s me cause I'm taking my chances…

So here I am, this new state in mind,
I still think the same yeah my mind state is fine,
no need for limelight, long as I rhyme tight,
don’t wanna be blind right but I guess in hindsight,
D. Dubs is fine here, Daren sees synergy,
keep the flow stone cold I moved in the winter-see,
I don’t wanna govern, but peace out Hillary,
freedom of speech is a right and my statute of liberty,
I’m gunna use it, turn this music up some,
girls who didn’t want this gotta say good luck hun,
rhymes I’ll construct em, destroy when they struck em,
girls blew smoke so much they shoulda coughed up lungs,
that’s in the past now, still gotta lash out,
for every outcast your mouth has cast out,
and here we go on your stereo never terrible lyrically ride this merry go round…


Props to DelinQuent for mixing this, feedbacks appreciated :y:
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Re: Empire State of Mind remix

Postby mcZu » Nov 15th, '09, 18:28

I liked it, delivery sounded like you were holding back, though. Flow is on point, lyrics are good, especially the multies and the rhyme scheme. Mixing is good too, so probz on that DQ. Enjoyed listening to it D.Dubs, keep it up.
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Re: Empire State of Mind remix

Postby Emadyville » Nov 15th, '09, 18:28

Coleon wrote:love the beat, gonna go ahead and say that, ya verse sounds good and pretty decently written but ya kinda got Jay's same flow but it's done well, I like the Q ban line lol, love the chorus man, one of my favs in a while, i like you on this beat, nice job, good flow, keep it up man :y:


thanks for checking it, yeah I kept the same flow, this was actually why I wanted to rhyme over this beat cause I loved the flow on it and actually the way this beat goes I'm not sure to do it diff to be honest, thanks again for the feed :y:
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Re: Empire State of Mind remix

Postby Emadyville » Nov 15th, '09, 18:29

mcZu wrote:I liked it, delivery sounded like you were holding back, though. Flow is on point, lyrics are good, especially the multies and the rhyme scheme. Mixing is good too, so probz on that DQ. Enjoyed listening to it D.Dubs, keep it up.


The delivery on this was kinda where I wanted to be, I was trying to keep a specific emotion to my lyrics, I appreciate you checkin it and feeding, thank you
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Re: Empire State of Mind remix

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Nov 15th, '09, 18:58

lyrics are perfect imo...delivery was kool..i can live wit that
loved how your structured your flow...great job
good song overall...didnt blow my mind but wasnt bad either :y:
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Re: Empire State of Mind remix

Postby shade45staff » Nov 15th, '09, 19:24

yo man,you did a pretty good job
decent lines,emotional flow
sick beat,you did it perfect
well done
congratulations man!
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Re: Empire State of Mind remix

Postby Emadyville » Nov 15th, '09, 19:31

Thanks chris and staff :y:
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Re: Empire State of Mind remix

Postby Mr. Chambers » Nov 15th, '09, 20:15

i'ma keep it 100%........

i never heard anything up until this.....and honestly...i'm a lil disappointed........

your flow was alright....but....it was a lil i don't wanna say shakey....but a lil stretched @ times....and then other times its rushed.....
delivery was alright....nothing amazing...

lyrics were cool.......a couple nice punches here and there........

i mean it isn't bad.....so i don't want you to think i'm calling it wack or you wack or anything...but like i saw there was an article out on you....and alot of ppl kept talking about your music....so i set high expectations.........

but yea....
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Re: Empire State of Mind remix

Postby Emadyville » Nov 15th, '09, 20:20

chambers wrote:i'ma keep it 100%........

i never heard anything up until this.....and honestly...i'm a lil disappointed........

your flow was alright....but....it was a lil i don't wanna say shakey....but a lil stretched @ times....and then other times its rushed.....
delivery was alright....nothing amazing...

lyrics were cool.......a couple nice punches here and there........

i mean it isn't bad.....so i don't want you to think i'm calling it wack or you wack or anything...but like i saw there was an article out on you....and alot of ppl kept talking about your music....so i set high expectations.........

but yea....


so it wasn't you're track no biggie, I appreciate the honesty :y:
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Re: Empire State of Mind remix

Postby Xray » Nov 16th, '09, 06:15

Glad you got DQ to mix this, finally your vocals aren't raw. Flow-wise this was alright, but you did sound choppy at times and it kinda ruined it when you did. First verse, in the third line you could have used a transition rhyme there cause it sounded weird just jumping from see/roughie to caddle/saddle. I can hear the aggression in your voice haha, which is good. Verses were good, and your structure was on point, beat wasn't really my cup of tea but it was ok. Cool track man. :y:
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Re: Empire State of Mind remix

Postby Emadyville » Nov 16th, '09, 06:46

Xray wrote:Glad you got DQ to mix this, finally your vocals aren't raw. Flow-wise this was alright, but you did sound choppy at times and it kinda ruined it when you did. First verse, in the third line you could have used a transition rhyme there cause it sounded weird just jumping from see/roughie to caddle/saddle. I can hear the aggression in your voice haha, which is good. Verses were good, and your structure was on point, beat wasn't really my cup of tea but it was ok. Cool track man. :y:


Thanks man I really appreciate that, and yeah I understand what you mean on the transition rhyme, that's something I gotta work on. Thanks again :y:
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Re: Empire State of Mind remix

Postby Slim Zaddy » Nov 30th, '09, 09:53

i love the beat and the mixing ,, you had a sick flow ,, keep it up 9/10 :y:
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Re: Empire State of Mind remix

Postby Emadyville » Nov 30th, '09, 19:26

Slim Zaddy wrote:i love the beat and the mixing ,, you had a sick flow ,, keep it up 9/10 :y:


thank you i appreciate the feed and you taking the time to listen :y:
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Re: Empire State of Mind remix

Postby Arrinef » Dec 3rd, '09, 09:01

props were its due :b:
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Re: Empire State of Mind remix

Postby Emadyville » Dec 3rd, '09, 21:10

ArrineF wrote:props were its due :b:


Thanks :y:
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