Redzek -This Life

[Le Tunisien]

ok here is a new song i made...well its open for collab ,if anyone wanna do the 3rd verse ,just let me know

http://www.zshare.net/audio/68649237a79733d4/


feed back much appreciated of course


follow with lyics
[Intro]

Yeah...im trapped in this life shit
n im so sick of it...
ayo


[Verse 1]

music is my only way of tellin how i feel
so i sit and write lyrics,to confront my fears
its like a nightmare trapped within dreams
runnin in a circle its the only way it seems
my blood rushin around right in my body
dunno wat i'll do next i just cant stop me
shaking, i dont want my life to stear left
tryna fight the demons inside of my chest
its hard coz i have to do it all on my own
help im stuck in this motherfukin zone
i want it to leave so i can live my life
coz i dont wanna end my soul with suicide
all i ask is for my life to stear in the right direction
avoid all the dangers;head towards my protection
im gonna break away from this horibble feelin
cant wait till the day when my lifes healing



[Chorus]

violence is making our life such a pain
it starts twistin turnin drivin insane
we need to stop all this beef on the streets
before it starts winnin by gettin defeats
destroying the air making it a disgrace
making this world we live in a worse place
today you be here .....tomorrow u be gone
listen to my words ,it will help you get along



[Verse 2]

there is much violence in this one world
we need a positive life so let it be unfurled
stop all the crimes that is goin on
try address issues through this song
u see it on the news another victim in your town
another man shot another man down
take all the guns out of the streets
if not all the problems will repeat and repeat
dont be stupid by carrying a knife
u can end up in jail for taking someones life
five years for carrying ,10 years for using
there aint no winners cuz every ones losing
have a think n see what the world is turnin into
just put the guns and knives down n u might get through
you only get one life so dont ruin yours
so dump your guns and knifes for a better cause



[Chorus]
violence is making our life such a pain
it starts twistin turnin drivin insane
we need to stop all this beef on the streets
before it starts winnin by gettin defeats
destroying the air making it a disgrace
making this world we live in a worse place
today you be here .....tomorrow u be gone
listen to my words ,it will help you get along

[Le Tunisien]

any feedbacks ?

[Slim Zaddy]

nice shit homie ,, iliked your voice,, but quality of ya voice,, is kinda turn off, i liked the chorus ,, delivery can be improved,, cuz at some points, it's boring a little bit,, i liked the lyrics same thing with the beat ,, good song,, keep it up

[Le Tunisien]

nice shit homie ,, iliked your voice,, but quality of ya voice,, is kinda turn off, i liked the chorus ,, delivery can be improved,, cuz at some points, it's boring a little bit,, i liked the lyrics same thing with the beat ,, good song,, keep it up

thanks for taking time and feeding back,much appreciated man

[Emadyville]

I liked where you were coming from with your lyrics, def wrote some meaningful shit. Idk what you record on but your voice sounds kinda crazy on this, I'm sure you know what I mean, and on the hook you really sound like a demon which actually kinda works with this song I think. Overall I mean your flow wasn't terrible but it wasn't great, I def saw some good spots, just gotta carry that through for the full track. The flow was at it's worst on the hook. Delivery was hard to tell because of your voice and how that sounded. On the hook you used the echo, but on hooks you gotta make em different then your verses ya know what I'm sayin? You sound to similar to the verses, doesn't stand out as much. Keep workin hard, I hope this helped

[Le Tunisien]

I liked where you were coming from with your lyrics, def wrote some meaningful shit. Idk what you record on but your voice sounds kinda crazy on this, I'm sure you know what I mean, and on the hook you really sound like a demon which actually kinda works with this song I think. Overall I mean your flow wasn't terrible but it wasn't great, I def saw some good spots, just gotta carry that through for the full track. The flow was at it's worst on the hook. Delivery was hard to tell because of your voice and how that sounded. On the hook you used the echo, but on hooks you gotta make em different then your verses ya know what I'm sayin? You sound to similar to the verses, doesn't stand out as much. Keep workin hard, I hope this helped

thx alot,that helps