Killer Instinct - BRAND NEW

[Cookzee]

a song i wrote in about 10 minutes, give me your feedback
Killer Instinct.mp3 - 1.35MB

LYRICS:

it's getting late
i've been walking around town since half 8
i see a lady, she's drunk and cannot walk straight
i take her back to my place
girl get in the tub
not just yet thought, wait till the foam bubbles up
you don't wanna be dirty, you don't wanna stink
your lips seem pretty dry baby do you wanna drink
all nip right downstairs, and go and get you one
im looking for the nyquil or anything to get it done
im heading upstairs laughin, when i take it to her
she downs it like an alcoholic, when i break it to her
you aint leaving this house, do you understand
your the slave, im the master, i got the upperhand
whats for supper, you little fucker
mess around shove a whole bush of broccali up her
i don't really think i have a sickness you see
coz a lot of people out there that are sicker than me


he's a killer
if he gives you a drink, don't take it
a killer
you will end up in his basement
a killer
girl i only want your skin
killer, killer
you can bet imma do it again

[Cookzee]

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[Vettori]

well done, i enjoyed this.. maybe cut down on the backround effects...spread them apart...
i liked the flow, and ur delivery is ok, maybe some more enthusiasm,, and it could be more enjoyable..
drop a thought on my songs.. lemme know what yu think

[Cookzee]

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[Nick. Y]

nice flow,though the track reminds a bit of some of Relapse songs

[GibbzyTrShady]

delivery is nice track is fairly good
besides tha fact you really must listen to so much eminem
not feeling the subject matter eminems overdone it already
but flow is nice lyrics are fairly good though
overall ide give it 5/10
beat is tight

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

were you from man ?


the flow is nice, i also went over this beat, i think it should be used in a darker way and your concept on the beat dont fit, but i think its coz the mixing the vocals arent submerged in the beat enough. but you flow good and the lyrics are good, your voice is different..i like different, the little intro at the start was ok but i was confused for about 4 seconds..like wtf is this lol

but good track man keep it up