NEW SONG "On The Ground"

[TripleNineThree]

New Song - On The Ground

Story behind it, I got arrested last week, charged with possession of marijuana, possession of paraphanelia (or however you spell it ha) and DWI because I was driving while i was high.

Theres been a lot of talk, this song was just to clear my name lemme know what you think!!

http://www.zshare.net/audio/6957760116d287f4/

Verse 1
Struggled with alotta thangs since I been up in the game
Tell me do you feel my pain I feel like i'm goin insane

Just look at my past I feel like I'm not the same
Got arrested for smokin grass and yeah I will take the blame

...Shouldn't have been hittin it What was goin through my brain?!
Now im ina predicament but see I'm forgivin by the Christ

I still feel like a hippocrite see I coulda went n lost my life
How can I explain myself?! Tellin you all NOT to do it

Yeah I deserve hell but I know God won't take me to it
Even tho I fell I just gotta get back up n keep on movin

...Alotta thangs I learned and this storm I gotta move right thru it
Feelin like I should be burned why didn't I confide in you?

...Went n took the wrong turn and I wasn't findin you
Instead I was gettin lost like I thru you out my mind

I wasn't thinkin about the cross then I went n did a crime
Luckily Jesus paid my cost picked me up so imma fly


Verse 2
It kinda seems like everybody wants to judge or criticize
You can hate or love me but take a look in my eyes

...It doesn't really bug me cuz truly I understand
Where you all are comin from to look fake that ain't my plan

I'll admit that I was dumb but I follow the son of man - took me as am
And he sees through it all but hes takin me as i am

...If you say you never fall you just fell because you are liein
But his grace is never gone and his love will always be flyin

Take a look at 1st John Chapter 1 five to ten
...That is droppin bombs on those who say they don't sin

See I know that I'm not perfect not better than other men
And my reputation I hurt it but see i'm not of this earth

...Don't how to word it but twicee I've been thru birth
And the spirit I gotta serve it see you can try to embarass me

Pointin out my flaws but you, you're living carelessly
You uphold the law but you be a modern day Pharisee


Verse 3 ( Scripture )
1 John 1: 5-10

If we claim to be without sin, we deceive ourselves and the truth is not in us. If we confess our sins, he is faithful and just and will forgive us our sins and purify us from all unrighteousness. If we claim we have not sinned, we make him out to be a liar and his word has no place in our lives. - Now Meditate on that scripture before you go and judge me. Think about it!

[TripleNineThree]

thanks for the feedback fam, and yeah i noticed i slurred ina couple of spots i'm not use to that fast flow haha drop a link and i'll rtf!

[Tash8]

man i'm feelin this... though i feeel like ur delivery is making u slur ur words too much.. fix that a bit.. it really helps if u breathe right...good job on that.. flow was sick i dont think u slipped once and i really know how hard it is to rap fast so props on that.. lyrics were good, served their purpose.. good job on that..

keep it up fam and if u can, plz leave feed on my new song "Memory Lane"

thx

[Vettori]

I liked this, U need more bass in ur voice... Like the way u mix has no bass... That element missing, "and i deal with that problem too" - It just takes from the song... I liked this with that aside..
and u can actually sound sick.. i can hear it here n there... Just Theres sumthin ur doin wrong.. and i cant quite put my finger on it.. hmm one of the issues is some words didnt rhyme when they should have.. i think the track was Done a bit sloppy. Maybe Devote ur time into doing it.. and wanting to do it. Maybe it's cuz you "had" to do this song, that u didnt do it to your full potential... But still, anything u work should mean something to you enough to appy the work... haha

anyways just my view. Lookin forward to hearing more.

[Solace]

Pretty dope track, but I felt the verses felt empty. Overlays would've sounded nice. Flow was nice. Delivery was alright. But yeah, cant say much negative bout it other than boring mixing.

[_Ironic_]

yo son, hook in the intro is DOPE, DOPE, DOPE

...and then u start rappin...ouch.

quality is pretty bad, delivery is okay...you sound way too hype for this type of beat and it just doesn't sound right...

flow is decent, nothin too special

lyrics are pretty good

hook got worse with that guitar playin in the background..or maybe it was just the effect u put on it..but it doesn't sound nearly as good as the intro...

LMMFAO @ the end you sound like:


overall it was a decent song..it started off promising but fell short of the 9/10 i was expecting by the intro..

7/10

[Justice]

yhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh i like this track man, this shit is dope, the intro and hook are dopee, delivery dope, beat dope, flow on point, this shit is dopeeee lol basically, i bet you cud do me a dope hook , see i cant sing lol


9/10 from me, wanna hear more bro

[GibbzyTrShady]

Right overall this is sick!! yer slurrin isnt good but the flow is sick an the lyrics are on point delivery is very tight tooo so well done man this track is hot downloaded too so hahah

[Nick. Y]

Mostly I like the lyrics,you could have worked more on the hook.

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

love the little singing bit at the start. is that a sample?


you got a real nice flow, sometimes you rush to keep on beat but it doesnt sound bad, the lyrics were nice, the concept is nice.

beats really good.


overall its a strong track, first ive heard from you, i like your voice you control it nicely and its got a nice pressence keeps your intrested good track man