Redzek - Depression

[Le Tunisien]

a new song i recorded...! i wrote this in a period when i was a no-lifer
i couldnt write the 3rd verse now,maybe i need to go back to my olllld state

http://www.zshare.net/audio/6985267170b8857f/

any feedbacks are appreciated! and i know i need a new mic for a better quality!

follow with lyrics !!

[Chorus]

cuz you dont know,what i been through
so let it go,and i'll show you
and depression is something true
not to mention its nothing new


[Verse 1]

when you'r sad when your lost
when you'r mad for applause

when you git all the shit,all you spit doesnt fit
all your life is a trick,grab a knife and just slit
turn your head or your wrists,go ahead dont just slip
or u'll feel so damn sick,such a queer such a prick
and u'r near to just quit, suicide is so quick
shall you stand shall you sit,when you offend by a Hit
if u a man try to Split,a few woMAN by a dick
dont pretend to be tough,cant stand its enough
when you tend to just bluff,you a fan of this cough
trust when its rough,its a must all this stuff
its crazy how you made me,act shady maybe manly
im motherfucking angry,so Please understand me
fuck you dont beFriend me,i dont wanna Be Friendly
im too mean to stand me,i am what you cant be
fuck life gimme plan b,what the fuck is family
,frankly,im so depressed,god relieve me,from this stress
all this bullshit is a mess,i need a bullet on the chest
you'd guess its not a test,yes its true what i confess

...damn man..its true what i confess!...

[Chorus]

cuz you dont know,what i been through
so let it go,and i'll show you
and depression is something true
not to mention its nothing new

[Chorus 2]

im a bastard,a master,i make you cry faster
life,you should blast her,i make u dry laughter
life is a bitch who wouldnt let you fuck her
and you live so miserable,pitiful and sucker
life is like game you should score its a soccer
what if you cant play,at your home you stay
and you sit and you pray,Waiting for ur fkn day
the day long waited,so long that it faded
if you hate it then state it,make it take it or break it
stop the fucking fake shit,dont invent it or create it
im motherfucking tired of what you call "Lifers"
and imma be inspired from Raps.. All Cyphers
cuz i dont give a fuck what you think or say
i got the fuckin paper,But no Ink to pay
so pay,attention to me,and listen closely
if u mention a g,make sure you coast B
and this is real talk, see it when i walk
n i am so depressed,too stressed,to die Folk
Try Stalk,me;your life u'll Cry For it
cuz in your fkn body,buddy i lie forks!

[Chorus]

cuz you dont know,what i been through
so let it go,and i'll show you
and depression is something true
not to mention its nothing new

[Le Tunisien]

1 comment for myself

[_Ironic_]

beat is alright, not really my type

quality is horrible..it's really bad..

lyrically this stands out, it's pretty tight lyrically

chorus is alright, kinda hard to understand.

your delivery actually isn't that bad at all..ALTHOUGH ITS VERY SIMILAR TO EMINEM which is a no no.

Flow was really smooth at some parts, and then fell apart at others, if you kept it consistent it would be much better..

overall this was pretty good, but the quality just didn't make it enjoyable.

Rating without quality issues in it

7.9/10

but with that quality?

5.5/10

try working on getting a better mic, it'd make listening to your music alot easier..also if you want some more feedback you should give an indepth feedback to other members..just a suggestion, im sure people will start responding when you respond to their songs.

[Vettori]

Yea the quality made it annoying to hear... Couldn't understand what yur sayin unless lyrics were provided..

so yea invest time into some "mixing lessons" / as well a new mic, even like a 60 dollar one... sumthin cheap but condensor with diaphram

and I think u got flow and wording.. in the proper spots, like ur pretty good at getting the basics

umm, Lyrics were great, just some odd Word's in places.... "Such a queer such a prick," line lOL
@ the word queer haha , just differant word choices would be better, ummm over all if it was listenable. im sure itd be a dope song..u still have a bit of that begginers touch when yu rap.. Not alot of passion into what ur saying.. I wanna hear "especially on this typa song" U stress the things that are making yu feel the way yu are, and "Make" me wanna help u because the things ur saying.. u should feel strong about..

what i notcied as well, if you write a song.. and wait till weeks later to record..u may not even feel the same about it...so the longer yu wait, the less The song will sound good.. and Accurate to how u felt at that time....

I try my best to record immediatly after i write...so i still have that burn



Cool song man, Quality No way enjoyable....

[Le Tunisien]

thanks a lot for the in depth feedbacks,really appreciated,would help me improve actually
thx! and @ ironic, thx too but really my delivery is very similar to eminem's ? didnt notice

[_Ironic_]

thanks a lot for the in depth feedbacks,really appreciated,would help me improve actually
thx! and @ ironic, thx too but really my delivery is very similar to eminem's ? didnt notice

when u started off your 1st verse it reminded me way too much of "the way i am"
just the way the scheme was layed and how u said it, it was just waaay too similar.

you did it well, don't get me wrong..but i just don't think that's the way u should continue with rap, try being more original and have fun with it instead of doing stuff that you're familiar with all the time.