JBM - Magic

[JBM]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gW40yFJg-jI


Comments?

Previous raps to compare.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9ahDFPA63MY - 60 seconds
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=R83kc9Zct88 - Music Box

[Slice]

flow could be better
i can't say something about the lyrics cuz it was hard to understand because of the quality. u should get a new mic or something

but keep grinding

[GibbzyTrShady]

u deffo elivated since the other tracks flow is nice too but yer quality really does suck man you should get a new mic and make sure you mix your vocals as best you can but yeah im feeling it could be ite if this was better quality.. RTF on my tune man

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

write your bars to fit in the snares in the beat, your just runing your lyrics over the beat without hitting the snare.

you seem to know what ya got goin with writing for now.

sort out the flow and qulaity, got potential man

[slimsoxshady]

kinda sounded like Rabbit Run to me...I liked it

i dont necessarily agree with the previous comment on hitting every snare...as long as you're consistent with the flow you can "rap over the beat" instead of "rapping to the beat"

[Tash8]

write your bars to fit in the snares in the beat, your just runing your lyrics over the beat without hitting the snare.

yeah i disagree with this too, you don't necessarily need to rap to the snare to flow properly, you just need to keep rhythm

[JBM]

Thanks for the feedback guys.

[GibbzyTrShady]

i deffo find it easyer to flow to the melody of a beat rather than the drums okay alot of people may disagree but you definantly have some potential man aye listen check my new track out an hit me up if you want to collab ill mix shit for ya

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

write your bars to fit in the snares in the beat, your just runing your lyrics over the beat without hitting the snare.

yeah i disagree with this too, you don't necessarily need to rap to the snare to flow properly, you just need to keep rhythm

yeh, but i have no idea how to explain in text how else to try improve your flow other than saying the basics of hit the snare and youll sound better, and i didnt wanne just say the bad without giving some sort of advice.

[JBM]

i deffo find it easyer to flow to the melody of a beat rather than the drums okay alot of people may disagree but you definantly have some potential man aye listen check my new track out an hit me up if you want to collab ill mix shit for ya

Thanks. Will do.