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Ruthless - I Dont Wanna Talk About It

Postby Tranquil » Jan 18th, '10, 09:22

This track is over G-Units - I Dont Want To Talk About. I would class this song as more of a comedy song from me. I still have to add voice overs on it, but here it is:

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Re: Ruthless - I Dont Wanna Talk About It

Postby B.A.D. » Jan 18th, '10, 13:27

the beat is good, good choice on it

hook is well done, the idea is nice, I like it... but sounds kinda bad timed or maybe it was too loud

quality is really nice, sounds clean, a lil loud, but very very clean, good job on that

the flow didnt came in as i expected, its very out of beat, you flow good but you are not flowing to the beat.... you need to connect more with the beat

very funny lines, good story telling

work on how you write to the beat and how you flow on it
like i said, you are doing it good, but not along with the beat

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Re: Ruthless - I Dont Wanna Talk About It

Postby Tranquil » Jan 18th, '10, 13:42

Big Ax-D wrote:the beat is good, good choice on it

hook is well done, the idea is nice, I like it... but sounds kinda bad timed or maybe it was too loud

quality is really nice, sounds clean, a lil loud, but very very clean, good job on that

the flow didnt came in as i expected, its very out of beat, you flow good but you are not flowing to the beat.... you need to connect more with the beat

very funny lines, good story telling

work on how you write to the beat and how you flow on it
like i said, you are doing it good, but not along with the beat

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Re: Ruthless - I Dont Wanna Talk About It

Postby GibbzyTrShady » Jan 18th, '10, 15:46

Beat is Heavy mixing is nice besides the fact vocals are a touch to high lyrics are funny as shit !!!
maybe just a lil more Annociation on ure words just a lil stronger delivery but other than that this is deffo a 8/10 man keep it up an dont forget to work harder an harder on every song you make!!
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Re: Ruthless - I Dont Wanna Talk About It

Postby Tranquil » Jan 18th, '10, 16:19

GibbzyTrShady wrote:Beat is Heavy mixing is nice besides the fact vocals are a touch to high lyrics are funny as shit !!!
maybe just a lil more Annociation on ure words just a lil stronger delivery but other than that this is deffo a 8/10 man keep it up an dont forget to work harder an harder on every song you make!!

Thanks Man :smoking: Im gonna turn the vocals down a bit when i actully get in there and do my voice overs,
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Re: Ruthless - I Dont Wanna Talk About It

Postby Xray » Jan 18th, '10, 19:41

Not bad bro, it's better than your previous work. The beat fits this song perfect, and the lyrics were on point. Flow is getting there, keep at it and you'll be there in no time. I liked the hook, it patched the track together nicely, keep working on the lyrics though, lyrically it could of been better. Keep at it homie. :b:
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Re: Ruthless - I Dont Wanna Talk About It

Postby Brownwall » Jan 18th, '10, 23:54

The song is good. It could sound a little more polished. Your flow was generally tight throughout. Lyrically, it was fine. Like you said, it was just a comedy track, but it could sound much better simply with a more polished delivery. Check out my group's stuff too if u find time: http://www.youtube.com/user/Brotherhood3MUSIC
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Re: Ruthless - I Dont Wanna Talk About It

Postby Tash8 » Jan 19th, '10, 00:00

haha cool song... flow is not good at all though work on that.. same with delivery, ti was pretty obvious you're reading though so u might wanna memorize.
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Re: Ruthless - I Dont Wanna Talk About It

Postby Mr. Chambers » Jan 19th, '10, 00:24

ok i'ma keep it 100%
i didn't enjoy the song at all....
i mean i understand you were going for like a "funny" story type of effect...but to me....neither of the stories were really funny or entertaining...accompanied with your poor flow and delivery pretty much made the song hard to listen to......i dunno if your new or not...but keep working on the flow and delivery....i ain't doing this to be an asshole.....i just don't think theres a purpose to lie to you and tell you this was a good song with minor improvements if i thought it was horrible......wish you the best on your next song 1....
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Re: Ruthless - I Dont Wanna Talk About It

Postby Tranquil » Jan 19th, '10, 02:46

Thanks to every one :flower:
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