systematic - xariuss

[xariuss]

Hey guys, just did a quick recording. Tell me what you guys think.

I'll make it further into a song this is just the first take.

Download Link

http://www.zshare.net/audio/7216554132e0cfc3/

would love some feedback! thanks in advance.

[gutawafang]

Lots of fucks.

But the rhymes are pretty good. Quite good man. LOL. Storytelling delivered quite good.

Just that the quality. Prolly the mixing. I not sure man. Not my kind of thing here.

[Tash8]

Hello Eminem

[xariuss]

Yeah the mixing sucks, that's because i basically have a program that plays the instrumental then I record over the top of it. Nothing else done.. I'm workin on clearin the voice up now with some of these extra features.

for the above comment, thanks for the reply but I wouldn't mind some actual criticism instead of comparisons or 'wanna-be' quotes.

Thanks anyway though.

[Tash8]

for the above comment, thanks for the reply but I wouldn't mind some actual criticism instead of comparisons or 'wanna-be' quotes.

fine, here's honest criticism

You're wack, a CLEAR imitation of eminem... When people compare Vettori to eminem i'm thinking ok that's bullshit... but how you can hear this and not think eminem? except wayyyyy fuckin shittier...

and no i dont act like this to everyone but i dont see u feeding anyone else

like everything is similar to eminem... the lyrics especially..then the flow, then the voice and then the delivery..

[xariuss]

for the above comment, thanks for the reply but I wouldn't mind some actual criticism instead of comparisons or 'wanna-be' quotes.

fine, here's honest criticism

You're wack, a CLEAR imitation of eminem... When people compare Vettori to eminem i'm thinking ok that's bullshit... but how you can hear this and not think eminem? except wayyyyy fuckin shittier...

and no i dont act like this to everyone but i dont see u feeding anyone else

like everything is similar to eminem... the lyrics especially..then the flow, then the voice and then the delivery..

Well that's my real voice, that's just how I rap. It's definitely an eminem beat giving some added false impressions. I didn't start the song to sound like EMINEM. If you hear his actual version of this it's completely different.

Anywhoo, with that aside thanks for your feedback I guess. Although you didn't really comment on things such as lyrics, but I guess it's easy to skip important details with a combative attitude like yours.

Not to mention that i'm fairly novice at this and don't really have a set flow.

What I was really looking for was some 'sophisticated criticism" and some advice in evolving my flow/lyrics."

[Tash8]

Well that's my real voice, that's just how I rap. It's definitely an eminem beat giving some added false impressions. I didn't start the song to sound like EMINEM. If you hear his actual version of this it's completely different.

Anywhoo, with that aside thanks for your feedback I guess. Although you didn't really comment on things such as lyrics, but I guess it's easy to skip important details with a combative attitude like yours.

I dunno what the fuck you're talking about, I gave you the best feedback YOU WILL EVER NEED. You just don't want to accept the fact that you sound like eminem. Which isn't a big issue considering you're probably a fan. Remember how everyone used to say eminem sounded like Nas during his Infinite days? well yes I'm telling you the same thing, except you sound like eminem and not Nas.

[classthe_king]

Actually, you do sound identical to eminem

[xariuss]

Ok, so other then that fact can someone comment on the lyrics and etc, like did you guys at least dig it?

far out, tough crowrd. lol

[Tash8]

far out, tough crowrd. lol

It's good man, would you rather have us tell you the shit? I mean that wouldn't help you much, would it?

I really am looking out for you when I say you sound like eminem, work on that... change up your style I suggest listening to something other than eminem for like a week then try writing some shit...try not rapping over an eminem beat (that obviously played a huge role in it)

[xariuss]

Yeah no worries, any idea where i can pickup some new instrumentals?

[Tash8]

Yeah no worries, any idea where i can pickup some new instrumentals?

there's a lot of producers on tr (i'm one of them, you can ask in the studio or check out our soundclicks, mine is http://soundclick.com/tashkar18 though i haven't uploaded a beat in age, If you want a specfic type of beat, I'm willing to make one for you (that way i can prove to you i'm not an asshole haha)

and if that's still not good enough
http://soundclick.com

you'll find plenty of free beats.

[xariuss]

Thanks for the links, is there a way to download those beats from SoundClick or is it preview only?

NvM, i guess you just contact artist and ask for permission.

[Tash8]

Thanks for the links, is there a way to download those beats from SoundClick or is it preview only?

NvM, i guess you just contact artist and ask for permission.

no, you gotta sign up for an account before u can download it.

[Kosovic]

Goddamnit Xarius is still alive?