HELPLESS - GT Ronic

[_Ironic_]

http://www.zshare.net/audio/72688768f5165866/
the intro track to Suburban Hero

drop a link to your track if you leave feedback, ill return the favor for sure.

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

i think it works as an intro track..flow is kinda boring to me..and your voice level sounds kind of monotone...even i can hear you change your delivery but it sounds "one-sided" idk
other than that everything seems pretty decent.. no complains

[DelinQuent]

i don't get it how you're taking about "streets" this and that but your album title is SUBURBAN hero...? i'm not hating, i'm just genuinely curious.

Flow is eh, not my thing. Delivery comes into play a bit too, maybe it's just your voice, but at time it just gets boring. When you amp up it's nice.

I liked the patience/patients line. didn't like the "for him" lines, just got boring.

overall, the constant breaks from the verse kept this song from having any real replay value for me personally. i also wasn't a major fan of the hook, but it wasn't bad. I've heard you do better than this, so sorry if i seem harsh. keep at it my dude.

[_Ironic_]

i don't get it how you're taking about "streets" this and that but your album title is SUBURBAN hero...? i'm not hating, i'm just genuinely curious.

Flow is eh, not my thing. Delivery comes into play a bit too, maybe it's just your voice, but at time it just gets boring. When you amp up it's nice.

I liked the patience/patients line. didn't like the "for him" lines, just got boring.

overall, the constant breaks from the verse kept this song from having any real replay value for me personally. i also wasn't a major fan of the hook, but it wasn't bad. I've heard you do better than this, so sorry if i seem harsh. keep at it my dude.

good looks on the feed both of ya'll..

@ delinquent. I understand ur confusion cuz u havent listened to alot of the music building up to this... so i'll give u the run down. if u listen to the hook, it explains it all

i got a feelin that my fans won't feel me,
and if they don't feel me imma just keep flowin
i got a feelin that the streets won't believe me
and if they don't believe me imma have to show em
I got a feelin that these bitches won't feel me
and if they don't feel me imma just keep posing

The last part was meant in a commercial publicity kinda way. The mainstream bitches won't feel me, so imma keep posing like for pictures, also as in a faking to be from the suburbs. Suburban Hero is the title because it appeals to the upper middle class buying the albums. it's got a few club bangers a few radio hits, but the main focus of it is still underground, which makes it ironic because it's actually an urban album.

hope that clears it up, but thanks for the indepth feed bro, i really appreciate it

[mcZu]

Lyrically it started off dope, but it kinda got less lyrical through out the song. Hook is, dunno, it suits its purpose I guess, well at least the purpose you were aiming for... Flow wise it's solid, delivery sounds okay to me, but I do understand where DQ is coming from, pause. You sound a bit bored at some spots.

Overall it's a good song Ronic, keep this shit up.

[Kosovic]

Hmmmm.... it waaaaaaaaas kinda ok attempt but nah. The intro was plain awful, mixed badly. Lyrically you are on the level of south rappers, not much of a flow, you more speak rather than flow. The production is an annoying loop, fitting for crunk or the other crap southern rappers used to feed us 4 years ago but now its old and washed up. Generally, no replay value, bad attempt. 2/10 at most.

[_Ironic_]

thanks guys for the feed,

[Mr. Chambers]

i've heard you do much better tbh.....

some of the punches were good..some were just overplayed.....tbh...i'd consider a different intro....something more hard......cuz the beat sounded quite amature......and you just didn't sound like you gave it your all.......

[_Ironic_]

thanks chambers appreciated homey
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