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Zu - Make Me

Postby mcZu » Feb 23rd, '10, 21:16

I tried something different, I consider this version a draft. I'm going to re-record this, so I welcome any constructive feedback, thanks in advance. Quality is far from superb, yes, so bear with me.

Listen: Zu - Make Me

Lyrics:
You make me wanna [3x]

Hearing your name, feelings hang around like an earring
A sound interfering, I wanna rock with you call me Golden Earring
This too left me catching feelings like Better Dayz disc two
Better stay my match up in heaven, like hell’s lit fuse
For seven hours straight awake, my eye lids do
Not wanna close, memories a drug, I don’t wanna overdose
So I sink through memories and hug the ink, true
It’s all I can do right now, I ship through
With my feelings without concealing my mental
State, so I state my state of mind and sample
Your gorgeous facial features in my mind, and do
I want a future with your gorgeous features..
I wanna collab with you, it’ll be a gorgeous feature
It’ll feature a future of futures, pain is an aspect of love
But accept the façade except the entourage, to a
Place of running in circles just like outside a ménage
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Re: Zu - Make Me

Postby dR3 » Feb 23rd, '10, 21:24

I don't know, you seem shy on the mic. You should be more comfortable and put in a little more energy.

But the lyrics are nice. :y:
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Re: Zu - Make Me

Postby mcZu » Feb 23rd, '10, 21:26

dR.dR3 wrote:I don't know, you seem shy on the mic. You should be more comfortable and put in a little more energy.

But the lyrics are nice. :y:

That's why I want to re-record it. I need to let it all out. Thanks for listening. :y:
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Re: Zu - Make Me

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Feb 23rd, '10, 23:29

you take way to many breaths at random parts...structure your verse writin-wise then your flow should be set also...aaand yeah be confident when you re-record it...also a bit more clarity in your pronouncation wouldnt destroy the track either...
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Re: Zu - Make Me

Postby gutawafang » Feb 24th, '10, 00:35

the way you rap does not make the rhymes stand out. kinda unique. didn't really like the voice here. beat is quite good.
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Postby yypl1986 » Mar 4th, '10, 22:20

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