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FAME||Rapper’s Anonymous

Postby FAME » Apr 17th, '10, 03:50

http://www.zshare.net/audio/75057530bbae39c8/

I think the song came out as my best so far. Would love some thoughts on it. :wub: k thanks
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Re: FAME||Rapper’s Anonymous

Postby Solace » Apr 17th, '10, 20:32

Sounds actually pretty good, a lot better than I expected. Already you have a deeper voice than Ice Killa. But please, up the volume on vocals, the beat drowns it. Flow is steady. You have a good delivery, definitely. The chorus is tight. Great job, just work on some more complex flows for now.
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Re: FAME||Rapper’s Anonymous

Postby FAME » Apr 17th, '10, 22:31

Solace wrote:Sounds actually pretty good, a lot better than I expected. Already you have a deeper voice than Ice Killa. But please, up the volume on vocals, the beat drowns it. Flow is steady. You have a good delivery, definitely. The chorus is tight. Great job, just work on some more complex flows for now.


Thanks for the feedback Solace, my voice sounds alot deeper when I rap then normally :p But thanks for the feedback, I'll definatly keep in mind your tips for my next jam. I feel like this beat was more complex than the last one that I did so I'm just slowly trying to do more and more complex flows. :y:
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Re: FAME||Rapper’s Anonymous

Postby Tash8 » Apr 17th, '10, 22:36

not bad honestly...compared to ur other shit it's not bad..better flow, still could use tightening but not bad.
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Re: FAME||Rapper’s Anonymous

Postby FAME » Apr 17th, '10, 22:45

Tash8 wrote:not bad honestly...compared to ur other shit it's not bad..better flow, still could use tightening but not bad.


Thanks for the feedback, have any tips for this tightening up? I'm just wondering like in what ways. I'm always looking to get better. :y:
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Re: FAME||Rapper’s Anonymous

Postby Tash8 » Apr 17th, '10, 22:55

FAME wrote:
Tash8 wrote:not bad honestly...compared to ur other shit it's not bad..better flow, still could use tightening but not bad.


Thanks for the feedback, have any tips for this tightening up? I'm just wondering like in what ways. I'm always looking to get better. :y:


by tightening up, i mean keep on the same tempo, sometimes u tend to speed up a few words here and there so you move urself off beat..it's ok to speed up and slow down, but just make sure when you do, u stay on beat with it.
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Re: FAME||Rapper’s Anonymous

Postby GoodGirlsGetGutted » Apr 17th, '10, 23:00

This is pretty good.
You have good voice, but a little more vocal attack would help. Try taking more air into your lungs and exhale from the diaphragm (not the lungs) for added voice strength and clarity.
Other than that, everything's been said.
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