New Verse (Produced By Me)

[Xray]

You know how I do, whenever I lay down shit, TR's the first to get it. I don't like hiding shit, feedback helps me perfect a track more. Please feedback on the beat also, its one of my personal favs.

Every single book gets judged, by its looks when its touched
Either hated or its loved. Either faded or discussed
Looks can be deceiving, but these reasons are just cheatin
I'm walking through these chapters not knowing what I'm readin
Barely breathin, eatin, talkin, wreckin demons
Nearly bleedin in the deep end, Sharks gettin even
Tryina face life, at the urge of every right
Cause the things I sacrificed took a turn and took a bite
Off my fingers, now its instants till I can not write
You feel the vibe? You decide, but something certain never dies
Besides its lights, the spirits have risen to Heist
to another level where several metals get sliced
I'm like a glide, you take a slide, you get swiped of life
Thick skulled and arrogant, I'm dominant in comparison
Fuck these lames traffickin, I am the kin, the next to win
They calling you Wahlberg cause nothings really Happening

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Post a link to your track and I'll return the favour.

[classthe_king]

This verse was very good. Lyrics were great and I love your delivery. Really rugged, idk how to explain it. Only thing I didn't like really was the beat. It was good except for the clicks or something, it got kind of annoying.

[Xray]

Thanks for your opinion. I think you're talking about the Hi-Hats yeah I felt they were kinda distracting too at first but you're listening wrong. You should be listening to the melody/drum pattern...that's why you don't feel the beat as much.

[Mr. Chambers]

not bad...the flow was pretty solid...lyrics were pretty nice...i actually loved the beat so good job...

what ot improve on?

your breathe control......you either need to rewrite so you ain't gasping or work on your actual breathing...cuz it was really stand out ish in this track
and your dubs....they were too loud imo....lower the volume on them some....

but thats all i really got to say...other then some minor things.....was a good track....

[Robbie G]

Good verse. Delivery matched the beat perfectly and the lyrics were good.

[gutawafang]

The accent is the usual Sajjad accent. It is unique and interesting too. It sounds pretty gangsta cuz of its deep tone in it.

And for this verse, the first line is quite ok. It would be better if the next line is related to it.

Nearly bleedin in the deep end, Sharks gettin even
Yeah, my cousins gonna eat you up. LOL jk

the flow is very good here man. i think that if this is a song, I would bump it as much as I bump "Breathing".



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