Jaz Feat. Tom Chambers "Not Mainstream"

[Jaz]

http://www.divshare.com/download/11445707-3b3
http://www.zshare.net/audio/7636314441c42854/
http://www.soundclick.com/jazny

3rd single off 'Earthquake: The Mixtape'

I'm on the first 2 verses, Tom's on the third.

Anyway my lyrics, the bolded is supposed to be a label rep talking but I'm sure you can figure that out:

Mr. label owner, think i got what you need
By the time this tape is over I'll fulfill ya greed
And don't sleep on it, make sure you get plenty z's
I got my beeper on so you can call me if your pleased

Listen kid I don't wanna hear your shit again
I told you once but I guess you don't know what I meant
I said you were nice, sure, but that don't mean a thing
You just don't have the sound that puts these diamonds in my ring

What do you mean? You just said I was nice!
And what the hell does this have to do with your ice?
This music is my soul, everyone should have listen
I heard it earlier, you had it bumpin' in your system!

Well you won't make any money kid, and that's a given
So pack your shit and get the fuck out of my office

Ya know what, fuck you, and fuck all of this
I'm gonna teach you a lesson, I won't call it quits
I'll kill all your kids, and every single person ever been involved in this!

(V2)
This isn't mainstream, nah, this is underground
A&R's don't want it, they want dumber sound
They go diggin' for rappers where a plumber's found
In the depths of ya toilet, and it's starts to annoy me
Number one hits? I generally avoid these
I truly am amazed by action these action these tours see
And of course these, money grubbin' kids
Do anything to snatch ya food from inside your ribs
Look at the size of this chain this kid's wearin'
He thinks it's hot but I bet that's not why people starin'
They all lookin' cuz your posture is all out of wack
Cuz you got fifty pounds of fake shit, just killin' ya back
That's really silly in fact, I spit a million raps
You split a milli in half, and all you really fuckin' did
Is get some kids to just flap, their fuckin' arms around
So one more time, I am underground

[classthe_king]

Jaz your verses were kind of boring, very simplistic rhymes, lyrics were average, no exceptional wordplay. Your delivery was clear and crisp and that was the best part. Didn't like the slow flow, it got boring without good lyrics to back it up.

Chambers killed his verse. I might dl the song just for this verse. No complaints.

[Jaz]

Jaz your verses were kind of boring, very simplistic rhymes.

Lol just admit you don't like my music intead of bullshitting every time I post dude. Every line in mine with the exception of maybe half my first verse is a multi. You said some kind of bullshit just like that for my mixtape.

I ain't even the type to hate on people giving negative feedback, but you seem to just make something up every time

[MC Anonymous]

Jaz your verses were kind of boring, very simplistic rhymes.

Lol just admit you don't like my music intead of bullshitting every time I post dude. Every line in mine with the exception of maybe half my first verse is a multi. You said some kind of bullshit just like that for my mixtape.

I ain't even the type to hate on people giving negative feedback, but you seem to just make something up every time

Simplistic rhymes can mean multies, you know. The way you constructed both of your verses was very poorly executed and didn't do anything to please my ears in anyway, unlike Chambers. Your rhyme scheme was simplistic despite the amount of ''multies'' you put into it. That's like saying Lil Wayne makes dope verses because every line is a multi. He uses them a lot, but the way he CONSTRUCTS them is poorly executed. This can directly parallel this situation right here.

Chambers verse was good, he had lyrical dexterity, his flow was nice, although I heard a little slip maybe once. His delivery, though, lacked something to me. Maybe power. I may not like the dude, but I must appreciate the skills he has. I'm not to stupid to admit when I'm wrong, so you did a good job Chambers.

[Jaz]

See that to me is much better feedback Anon.. but the difference is between structure, and rhyme simplicity.. What you touched on was structure, what he said was totally different. (whether that's what he meant or not) Had he said I didn't like the way you structured your rhymes, that would have been far more reasonable.

Anyway, thanks for listening.


And Chambers when you see this post up your lyrics if you got em written out.. Couple lines I missed a few words and I'm curious as to what they were.

[classthe_king]

I actually tried to give good, honest feed without being a dick. I said your rhymes were simple, which to me they were. You had no internal rhymes, and the few multis you had weren't that amazing. The underground-dumber sound-plumbers found, was good but thats it basically. But if you're just going to complain about my feed I'll stop giving you feed.

[Slovinec]

In my oppinion that last guy messed up the track

[Jaz]

I actually tried to give good, honest feed without being a dick. I said your rhymes were simple, which to me they were. You had no internal rhymes, and the few multis you had weren't that amazing. The underground-dumber sound-plumbers found, was good but thats it basically. But if you're just going to complain about my feed I'll stop giving you feed.

So you consider ALL of these simplistic rhyme schemes?

office/all of this/call it quits/all your kids
Label owner/tape is over
annoy me/of course these/avoid these/tours see
silly in fact/million raps/milli in half

Then the ones you mentioned...? The rest of the multis I had I consider basic, but you're really gonna sit here and tell me these are below average multis?

[classthe_king]

I actually tried to give good, honest feed without being a dick. I said your rhymes were simple, which to me they were. You had no internal rhymes, and the few multis you had weren't that amazing. The underground-dumber sound-plumbers found, was good but thats it basically. But if you're just going to complain about my feed I'll stop giving you feed.

So you consider ALL of these simplistic rhyme schemes?

office/all of this/call it quits/all your kids
Label owner/tape is over
annoy me/of course these/avoid these/tours see
silly in fact/million raps/milli in half

Then the ones you mentioned...? The rest of the multis I had I consider basic, but you're really gonna sit here and tell me these are below average multis?

I didn't catch on the silly in fact/million raps/milli in half, thats good
The other ones don't really rhyme that well.

[Jaz]

Not all of them are direct rhymes, but they are all set up with assonance and/or slant rhymes.. Moreso when spoken than read.

Edit: And thanks for listening Bizarre

[Mr. Chambers]

Simplistic rhymes can mean multies, you know. The way you constructed both of your verses was very poorly executed and didn't do anything to please my ears in anyway, unlike Chambers. Your rhyme scheme was simplistic despite the amount of ''multies'' you put into it. That's like saying Lil Wayne makes dope verses because every line is a multi. He uses them a lot, but the way he CONSTRUCTS them is poorly executed. This can directly parallel this situation right here.

Chambers verse was good, he had lyrical dexterity, his flow was nice, although I heard a little slip maybe once. His delivery, though, lacked something to me. Maybe power. I may not like the dude, but I must appreciate the skills he has. I'm not to stupid to admit when I'm wrong, so you did a good job Chambers.

wasn't aware you disliked me.............thanks i guess?

In my oppinion that last guy messed up the track

dam grow up......you must be 14 at the oldest....

[Splitz]

I was feelin this definatly. Keep it up mane.. Chambers and you killed it.. great stuff..

[Jaz]

Thanks for checkin' it out Splitz.. Other reviews of the track (just so Chambers gets to see them):

"hell yea dude, shits dope…i liked ya last mixtape, deep underground…that shit was also fire
i like ya style and flow…great song, overall i give this a 9/10"

"That was dope dude. Pretty creative.. was feeling this shit a lot. Quality seemed sick too..
10/10 honestly."

"Your sound is crazy , ur flow is sick, and i like the concept of this track 10/10"

"The quality and concept is up to par but maybe the some rhymes could've been alil better but overall is still good"

"9/10
It would've been a 10/10 but you set the bar so high with your verse it was hard for other dude to match your level. Both of ya'll killed it though but yours was better."

"hot track!! downloading now. both yall some ill cats. i love the concept and the role play in the verses!! great job homies!!"

"Yea, that was sick!
I really liked your rhyme schemes and how you changed your flow around..
Only thing, I reckon this would sound even better on a faster beat!"

"soundz good Jaz, like filthy stated, i like the rhyme schemes, nice work!!"

[MC Anonymous]

You wanna collab, Jaz? I'd like to be on your upcoming mixtape.. as it seems like you're making one.

[Jaz]

link me to some of your stuff