I'm still alive

[DelinQuent]

Hello fellows. It's been a long time, been busy, had a daughter, full time job, real busy.

Story behind this, kid from my area recorded a song about drugs, shooting people, various elements of violence that DO occur, just not on the major scale that his song described it to be.

So, I dissed him.

http://www.zshare.net/audio/78256099b30fdce7/

Welcome to Allentown? But bitch it ain’t that bad/
Catch you lyin on ya track, yeah you tryin to be bad/
Can’t deny that shit was wack, please walk away from rap/
Or just hang yourself to that piece of shit you call a track/
Have you ever heard of flow? If you haven’t lemme know/
I could share some, got it by the boat load/
Please hold dog, fore you get rolled on/
Say you move bricks? You prolly sold none/
Talkin bout guns, have you even held one?/
Talkin bout narc cops? Here’s where your start stops/
You prolly private school choir, fuckin little liar/
You sell and shoot to kill like the water’s on fire/
I’m hot boy, and ya not boy/
I should shut the fuck up fore you pop toys/
I should duck down, while you pump rounds/
The white boy is back, and you been punked out/

The "Boy" lines are a reference to his song.
The intro is a mockery of his chorus.

[codyp]

That was dope, I liked it.
Only think I would fix is the "You prolly private school choir", only part that didn't sound right. The rest was on point.

[Xray]

Nice to see you back doing your thing, I thought you became too cool for us. Anyways.

I didn't like the lyrics, its very basic. You need to expand your vocabulary more, and by that I don't mean on a Canibus level, no. But you need to do this to avoid doing track/rap typa rhymes cause its done too many times and it makes you look bad, unless done in a more creative way. But yeah this was a very weak diss, it was on some commercial shit. And the delivery was pretty gay at some points, please don't do that whole 50/Nicki Minaj type shit, you are NOT in their shoes to sell like that, so don't do it. As a diss it was weak, as a track it was ok, its like you got tired out of rap. Cause I don't see the hunger/motivation in your raps, seems like you've said ok to your style and don't choose to step up. You needa step your shit up bro.

[Jaz]

I like it. Good quality, dubs sound clean.. Delivery and flow is solid. Lyrics are decent.


Every now and then the breaths are a bit noticeable but other than that

[gutawafang]

Flow is good. I like it man.

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

yo DQ..nice thang!

[ahckiryL]

it was a cool lil diss...nothing crazy but the quality, voice projection, mixing and emotion was on point...ur flow fell off in some parts but overall sounded clean...Keep doin ur thang 1

Check out my shit to when u get a chance

[DelinQuent]

Nice to see you back doing your thing, I thought you became too cool for us. Anyways.

I didn't like the lyrics, its very basic. You need to expand your vocabulary more, and by that I don't mean on a Canibus level, no. But you need to do this to avoid doing track/rap typa rhymes cause its done too many times and it makes you look bad, unless done in a more creative way. But yeah this was a very weak diss, it was on some commercial shit. And the delivery was pretty gay at some points, please don't do that whole 50/Nicki Minaj type shit, you are NOT in their shoes to sell like that, so don't do it. As a diss it was weak, as a track it was ok, its like you got tired out of rap. Cause I don't see the hunger/motivation in your raps, seems like you've said ok to your style and don't choose to step up. You needa step your shit up bro.

First, thanks everyone for the feed, I appreciate it.

Sajjad, thanks for the long reply, I appreciate it as well. The main thing I don't understand is the 50/nick minaj comparison, I've honestly never even heard a track from nick minaj lol. But you're 100% right with the vocabulary statements. I haven't really written or recorded much of anything in nearly a year. Trying to get back into it. Again, I really appreciate the long reply.