Zu - What am I gonna do?

[mcZu]

Feedback will be appreciated. Inspired by D.Dubs (Emadyville), so a quick shout out to him.
And, yes, I've got fucked up mic. Still, that won't hold me down, lol.

Zu - What am I gonna do?

[Verse]
Still just friends, Tamara, no end, sayonara
Six months apart is by far a...
...sick bond that is held by deception
Planting ideas in your head, inception
Certain ways of perception, covered under sections
So by thorough inspection and a Zoro direction
I’m heading to a tornado...
Pulled in slow, attraction’s traction
It’s like torture... God... it’s...
Like falling in love with a goddess
She’s right there... in front of you
But you can’t touch her, she’s like a nun to you
It’s like love’s embodiment is numb to you
Stuck in this love... song... too
My heart is having swift beats, I need the keys
To her heart, so please, just tell... me...

[Hook - sang] [2X]
What am I gonna do?
I can’t get through to you
You look right through me
You just can’t see me
What am I gonna do?

[Emadyville]

I loved the lyrics man, they def fit this and you could tell it was a heartfelt verse.

Recording wise, I thought the slow flow was a bad choice, but that might have had to do with the sound quality of your mic like you said. Delivery needed a little more from you, I didn't necessariliy feel what you were saying.

Good work tho man, I'm glad you got to use this beat

[mcZu]

Thanks for the feed, man. Appreciate it.

[Jay-19]

Pretty much agree with what Emady said.
I see what you tried to to with the flow, but it just didn't work.
Maybe if you re-write this with a new different flow it could be good, because the lyrics are pretty tight man.

Keep it up!

[Terry_M]

I agree with the others. The flow on this definitely did not work, but the lyrics were good and I felt them.