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D. Dubs "Survival"

Postby Emadyville » Aug 23rd, '10, 17:58

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BrYpWbMrL1A

This is an older song, but something I thought people on here would like, just one verse that I was going for a straight hip-hop feel.

Lyrics:
I could sit here write rhymes til I die,
Write the sickest verse have DQ spit it bring me back alive,
The linguistic statistics I visit so consistent,
No shit it’s a win when I spit it’s,
Incredible it’s visible not trivial, exceptional,
This ain’t lust it’s love, an arrangement,
A marriage engagement for me and the mic in my basement,
No estrangement from it,
So you must stomach how I phrase it,
Just love it and praise it’s a covenant and sacred,
A rhyme plausible becomes audible,
I throw it up like I vomit all,
That’s comical, not at all, cause I’m volatile,
I’m jumpin this fence with intents ta invent rhymes that go a distance,
Unknown make entrance,
To the game my intrest to change make indents insane to the index that they claim,
But I’ll start at D. Dubs for instance to name,
He seems-stressed with regrets and yes he gets depressed,
Represses then regress just tryin to refresh,
He can’t be-blessed scars show deep-ness
So he’s sleep-less, tired and detests,
Being cut from the wrong clothe he’s after the seamstress,
Not following footsteps everyday he looks death,
In the eyes shakes his hand so he can say he shook death,
It’s euphoric, metaphoric, rhetoric at its finest,
Ignore-it in your mind enough times to rewind-this,
My kindness has the glass half full,
Cause half empty only tempts me to become an asshole,
So fill the glass til it spills and shatters doesn’t matter if you look it’s,
A looking glass looking back at me crooked...


Feedbacks appreciated :y:
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Re: D. Dubs "Survival"

Postby M-Pyre » Aug 23rd, '10, 21:46

damn, your lyrics are nice man!

flow on point all the way through. it's a shame your vocals werent properly mixed in otherwise you'd have a lyrical hiphop banger. needs to be longer tho :y:

btw, you sound exaclty like eminems little brother, nathan. except his voice is a little deeper and a bit unclearer.

keep up ya game man :y:
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Re: D. Dubs "Survival"

Postby Terry_M » Aug 23rd, '10, 23:14

I agree with what M-Pyre said. The lyrics were real fire, the mixing just let them down.
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Re: D. Dubs "Survival"

Postby M15HKA » Aug 24th, '10, 00:12

Great job man flow suited the Mobb Deep beat :y:
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Re: D. Dubs "Survival"

Postby Emadyville » Aug 24th, '10, 03:32

thanks guys. yeah i mixed this before i knew how to make vocals clearer, i should possibly redo this track, and yeah the beats only like 2 min i think

edit: i posted the lyrics as well :y:
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Re: D. Dubs "Survival"

Postby M-Pyre » Aug 24th, '10, 06:16

:y:

question: do you have a condenser mic? if you do, maybe we could collab together :y:
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Re: D. Dubs "Survival"

Postby B.A.D. » Aug 24th, '10, 14:10

this is definitively old... you even mention DQ in there.. any news what happened to him tho', heard he had a son or sometin like that, he was one of my favs emcees on here, really nice.

either way... I wont feed much cuz well, as u said its old... but lyrics are impressive, but the flow is ok but the delivery is boring... either way... dope dope lyrics.

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Re: D. Dubs "Survival"

Postby Emadyville » Aug 24th, '10, 23:12

Big Ax-D wrote:this is definitively old... you even mention DQ in there.. any news what happened to him tho', heard he had a son or sometin like that, he was one of my favs emcees on here, really nice.

either way... I wont feed much cuz well, as u said its old... but lyrics are impressive, but the flow is ok but the delivery is boring... either way... dope dope lyrics.

good as :y:


yeah that's fine, thanks tho


he had a daughter actually. and i still talk to him, so mentioning wouldn't be out of the ordinary. i know he doesnt record much anymore tho, or at least he only sent me like one verse a month ago roughly
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Re: D. Dubs "Survival"

Postby Emadyville » Aug 24th, '10, 23:13

M-Pyre wrote::y:

question: do you have a condenser mic? if you do, maybe we could collab together :y:


o fuck yo i dont even know, DQ picked all the shit out and set it up at my house, i'll have to ask him haha
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Re: D. Dubs "Survival"

Postby classthe_king » Aug 24th, '10, 23:27

This was a great song :worship:

Everything was dope. Only thing I didn't like about it was I felt like your delivery could use a little more energy, it felt bland at times.
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Re: D. Dubs "Survival"

Postby Emadyville » Aug 24th, '10, 23:43

classthe_king wrote:This was a great song :worship:

Everything was dope. Only thing I didn't like about it was I felt like your delivery could use a little more energy, it felt bland at times.


yeah, im debating redoing htis now that it seems people really like it. we'll see, thanks for the feed :y:
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Re: D. Dubs "Survival"

Postby Xray » Aug 24th, '10, 23:56

Nice lyrics, and nice choice of beat. But very bad delivery, you just sound so cheesy with that delivery, it's like you're spitting with a smug face on. And you sound like a geek like this. Sorry but, this is how I see it. That delivery just turned me away. I can't take your lyrics seriously with that delivery being there. I'm not a fan of how you flow, you sound extremely happy when you use that flow and delivery. Sorry bro. You've did much better. Care to return feed? :sweating:
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Re: D. Dubs "Survival"

Postby Emadyville » Aug 24th, '10, 23:58

Xray wrote:Nice lyrics, and nice choice of beat. But very bad delivery, you just sound so cheesy with that delivery, it's like you're spitting with a smug face on. And you sound like a geek like this. Sorry but, this is how I see it. That delivery just turned me away. I can't take your lyrics seriously with that delivery being there. I'm not a fan of how you flow, you sound extremely happy when you use that flow and delivery. Sorry bro. You've did much better. Care to return feed? :sweating:


now i'm def redoing this, thanks for the motivation :y:

yeah i'll return it tonight, cant listen to shit right now :y:
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