Bar - On two Occasions [Remix to the game one night]

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listen - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-RqiPmgrRjM

lyrics in the description, just a remix i did, feedback appreciated

[Steve Spag]

Such a sick Game track, so it's gonna be hard to top, but you did nice! Your lyrics on this track were VERY dope, and they seemed to match up quite nicely. The flow was great, pretty much on-point the whole time. Only thing I would say needs improving is the confidence in your voice. You got a good voice but you just need to be a bit more loud and a bit more clear and then there's nothing that can stop you.

Great work man, keep it up!

[$0 R3@L]

that was great.

Flow was on-point and accent was actually very clear.

Great stuff man

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thanks guys


its a hard line im tyring to walk, i have no illusions that the scottish accent is great in hip hop, but i need to keep it there while spitting my raps in a way that my accent wont destroy, but at the same time i cant change my accent, its a dificult balance to keep my delivery 100% but keep my voice 100% im working on it hard and i hope im improving. i know i can keep my accent were my local base wont hate but also deliver it in a way that people not from scotland wont get put off.


the new tape im working on ive been really trying hard with that aspect of my rap so hopefully people will notice the work ive put in

[B.A.D.]

damn, this is my favourite song from Game, so might be hard to top

where did you recorded this? the'res a bit lack of quality, hope it was not on a studio bcuz otherwise they would be fucking with you. The flow is great throughout the song you kept it really good. and I love the lyrics, deep stuff in there really good. anything to be worked on??... not really, everything is pretti up there, u got everything u need. I think maybe the accent is a struggle for me being outside of scotland, I listened 2 times, one withour reading the lyrics and one reading them, and damn lol, I got everything diferently hahaha. but thats just on the language thing, and its better to keep it real and be where you from, so I respect that.

overall, good as man, I liked it. its a shame it was only one verse cuz I was noddin my head to this

mind rtf? there's a thread called "Promo 2" around