by python » Apr 26th, '13, 00:12
Here's something unfinished I worked on last night,
3 Peat - You didn't wait to suck, did you Wayne? "They can't stop me, even if they stopped me, HEH HEH HEH!!" You... You do know that if they stop you, you've been stopped? That means that you can be stopped, but you... Ehhhh, fuck it. His voice is disgustingly annoying on this track, "Ewuwuhgh" is not a very pleasing sound, not from Eminem, and definitely not from Wayne's fucked up auto-tuned voice. Then he mentions hoes (has nothing to do with the previous line, which is basically a "whoa i'm so awesome" type-line), and for some reason, mentions Maestro creating the beat of the song, then calls him a "fukkin RIEGHT hoe" despite the fact based on previous and future songs by Wayne, hoes are usually women, and Maestro is not a woman. Here's one of the most outstanding problems off of the song, he voice is more fucked up than Zombified-Encore-Eminem. He sounds so damned excited, and his words barely sound right. Was he on drugs while making this album too? It sure looks like it. Okay, so he doesn't give a "motherfuck", which is definitely the foreshadowing of a forced rhyme. There were a few rhymes he could've made with "motherfucker", but he decided to just use "motherfuck" and talk about killing someone's grandmother and motherfucking someone's baby... what the (mother)fuck?!
Just to get a point I wanted to make about rhyming on this song, I've bolded all of the rhymes in the next two verses.
It's Tha Carter III bitch, better put ya supper up
Hollygrove, I throw it up, like I'm tryna lose my gut
Fuck is up, beat him up, like a million uppercuts
Got a million duffled up for the fuck of it, shit
He's clearly trying to make an awesome rap here, but he rhymes "supper up" with "up" and "gut" and "up" and "up". There are exactly 2 lines that rhyme with "supper up", and the rest just rhyme "up", and that's only rhymed with a different word once. Then, out of nowhere, he rhymes "it" with "shit".
Get on my level, you can’t get on my level
You will need a space shuttle or a ladder that’s forever
However I’m better if not now, then never
Don’t you ever fix ya lips unless you 'bout to suck my dick
Here, his rhyming is better, but then, in the middle of the line, he makes another reference to a girl sucking his dick. It isn't the start of a new line, so what up? It doesn't even rhyme with "level".
Bitch swallow words, taste my thoughts
And if it’s too nasty, spit it back at me
Two more inches I’d've been in that casket
According to the doctor I could have died in traffic
Again, more good rhymes, but he still makes random lines occur in this line. Him having two more inches meaning being in that casket? Then he could've died in traffic? The hell?
The more I think about it, I think Lil Wayne just likes spurting shit like a homeless person, and t
I will finish the review on Friday, as I'm too busy to finish it so quick. That's just something to hold you over.