I guess I would say that IM NOBODY that CAN relate

[OLDZKULE]

I got a long ass story that nobody gives a fuck about
so my confidence slowly fades getting replaced with doubt.
I went from high school to county
from the county to the pen
fucked up on parole and went back again
when I was finally done
learnin this
in and out shit aint no fun.
so I did my best to go legit
got a job doin some 9 to 5 shit
went union, made my presence known and soon had my own crew
Then thought to myself what else can I do?
so I walked away from Ironwork and went back to school
I was lovin to learn thinkin now this shit is cool
ended my first semester on scholarship and a 3.5 g.p.a.
I got 2 A's 1 B and 1 c
and unlike the 13 convictions on my record
none of these were attached to a felony..
awe fuck it Im done ,
I type to much slower that the lyrics run
The first day of my second semester I
got shot In the face
Lyin ass cops made me to be a fuckin disgrace
after I was shot I thought aint this a bitch
shot in the face by a city cop
found by a sheriff in the ditch
was i armed NO
did I pose a threat NO
but they thought I was dead
so they made up a bullshit story instead
was 3 days before anyone else knew
but I couldnt talk n my friends were like what the fuck do we do?

The fuckin cops never thought Id survive
They had to change their story after my friends discovered me alive
I get out of the hospital And got fuckin evicted

I rented my house from the same city
The cop that shot me was charged and convicted
Physical evidence alone proved the cops were lyin
props to 50
I guess ill die tryin

[Spyder]

see this is your first post so ima give u rough feedback to biuld u up
this wasnt anything for me bro, your rhyming was very basic and from what i saw skimming over it
i didnt see 1 multi in there. structure, tho not the most important thing was all over the place
which in turn gave it a wierd flow. there was no complexity nor large vocabulary, it was rather boring
story/topic was alright but nothing that touched me.
look at some other peeps on here and learn from there, without biting them or jackin their style
all for your benifit man, no hate

[embm]

ok wtf lol
interstin way 2 intro urself
is all tat shit tru?
welcom & keep writin

[Arabian Shady]

oooo kaaayyy
lol
wellcome to the forum homes
Stay active

[Bistnal]

Interesting way to introduce yourself. But welcome, and enjoy yourself here

[OLDZKULE]

Yeah thats all thats shits true and still aint the half of it I aint no rapper I aint tryin to be a rapper Im talking about real life no bullshit relaiting to shit like ummm shot in the face But dont get me wrong I aint even tryin to be claimin to have any skills I ts the only way I know how to keep a simple flow of things Elementary Simple connections that keep my mind a little distracted. Like 50 the bullet didnt exit. I have a traumatic brain injury glock 40 to the face by by teeth upper jaw through the tongue split tonsil n stopped in the back of my throat. I aint no song writer no rapper thug nothin like I said Im a nobody I'll look that punk ass cop dead in his eyes n tell hip if he thinks he had the right to "do it again bitch I gotta keep it light and stupid simple more complex more thought put into this shit id be shootin mother fuckers by the end of the week or less.

I can relate to anger hate struggle and some of the most fucked up shit goin from a criminal to legit thetransition The amount of shit talkin bullshittin fake punk pussy ass mother fuckers that run their mouths after not keepin their word on shit that think its cool to take shit and get over on somebody then call a mother fucker out then run inside n lock the fuckin door when someone shows up and then what next I aint gonna fuckin leave gunshots and yep they battle back with the 911 call n shit whats the fuckin point stupid ass shit to prove what point n how far does it go its a daily battle handle this shit n go to prison yet Im looking for any other other decisions like this fucking guy here my space post for him

Gettin closer, n closer,
its coming to a head:
Let the truth be said
or mother fuckers left for dead.

I been quiet as I can be
I dont care if I die
or end up in the pennitentuary
I been sayin it now u gonna see
how your life changes when you become my enemy
as it stands no one knows and no one sees
That your a real fuckin bitch lyin ass pussy
I did all I could now you gets no mercy
Emenim says it best n you will know "I Can Be"

We going to have a chat face to face
N you will know without a doubt that your a fuckin disgrace.
N yeah I Fucked your mistress then rubbed your toothbrush on my nuts,
how the fuck did that taste.
I want everything you got in you-thats right bitch bring it on.
N your bitch told me your dicks so little you wont fuck with the lights on.
Im not going to leave you until every bit of your prides gone.
thats right you little bitch your fuckin runnin out of luck.
The fact is any way it goes your gettin stuck.
And its going to be up to you to figure out how to make me happy when I dont give a Fuck.

I warned you I told you if you thought you could Fuck me like that n blow me off that you should kill me or have someone else do it because before I get through with
you your gonna wish you had.
Too late for that shit now n you aint ever seen me mad

a little heads up there aint no stoppin me
We are goin to trial now you cant cop a plea.

He who has ears let him hear there is only two people on the planet that I know that have anything to fear

about me..you probably wont ever see me comin
and youll never see me runnin
but if you ever see me gunnin
might be your last time.

its all up to you cuz we can take it to blast time
before You acted like you was fuckin listenin
now I got to pick a spot on your face to put my fist in and when your tell who did it
n be sure n tell the cops a.k.a. Dominick Tristen

I thank anyone for any replies This aint about me rappin or havin talent it its real life !00 % true shit Its the only shit I can hear that reminds me that there are God willing at least a few People that will stand on shit alone or with a crew 1 on one or one on 1000 -who nomatter how desguised It aint ok to be a bitch mother fucker If Im the last one then fuck this whole planet Ill leave it all up to YHwH

[Spyder]

u started a new verse like halfway through... shit didnt even make sense
post it in another thread