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C.R.E.A.M v/s DA. (DA wins.) 4-1

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C.R.E.A.M v/s DA. (DA wins.) 4-1

Postby Sam. » Aug 5th, '11, 12:32

[C.R.E.A.M]
Now my definition of chopping is a task done fast called a murder
A keystyle to no beat, enough to feed this fat a blood batch and no burgers
Fag's a bug, man! and i'll burn him with my ink pen and book of nine pages
Do the impossible and kick this fat fashion guru to the Air, give him a Crooked Eye lay(e)r
Your lines are nursery rhymes, when I spit i'm murking ya'll while I ain't even talkin' black, B, tho !
Oh shit i'm black so I'm automatically ending this w1gger with my presence and he's hiding in the parking's back, see? lawl.
Stocking fats in his titties cuz he ain't got enough balls to face me, went with Lello, so he can play with people in his friend list.
You probably spent half of your living life while mad to write the lines to face me, you're already bleeding while bending
Shit's called "surrendering" in a female Polar Bear, comparing these makes sense in a faggot way and a fatty way
Must be hard on you to be blending in, cause my rhymes are the blendtec of the fashion ways and the faggy plays
Bastard's baking pam and cakes, he's eating and dickriding while reading this verse
Accused Lello that he Blends in but you're the one that Hops-in on the thread, shit-talking while getting bleeded from some
A deleted persona, losing in every debate and calling it a successful troll
Plus getting a buttache when losing to Lello, ranting and searching like an inspector's job
However I may show some remorse for you
And end these two lines with no facts repulsing you.
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1)I'm not rapping fast.
2)I did that verse in 15 minutes
3)He types like this, i'm assuming he doesn't know how to write words in their real formats. And reference to calling everything "pretentious"
4)He's fat, so launching him to the air is impossible. Fashion Guru wordplay with Nike Airs, Crooked Eye obvious punch
5)Impressions tho, B tho nikka !
7)Wordplay, he's too fat his titties are bigger than his ass.
8)He probably spent more than weeks writing his verse, I made mine in 15 minutes
9)When a female polar bear "surrenders" it means bending over (Which goes with the "bleeding while bending shit") I'm saying, the punchline matches in two ways, he's a faggot, and he's fat (And I posted a polar-bear picture when he posted his pic)
10)Blending in while fat is hard, my rhymes are the Blendtec (Company that advertise "Will It Blend") so anything'll fit
11)Accusations of ghost-writing.
12)Blends (like I said) but he's the one that Hops-in dicks (He says he hates Hopsin sometimes and says he's good sometimes lol)
13)That's true, when DA! lose he says "I was juss trollin yall nikkaz lawwl successful"
14)If you seen his battle with Lello's aftermath you'll know what i'm saying
15/16)Insult to Injury


[Devil'sAdvocate]

hold up,before your eyes get swolle up like a donut (haha)
just like he commit to suicide,this guy will get his wrist & throat cut
and i wont budge,going in full thrust,i cant pull disgust
switch up,i wont stitch ya even though im the sharpest knife in the drawer
scared?got a twitch ha? dont you know this the darkest strife in the core?
seems not,this a demons plot,he a dweep,dude just squeaked
he living life as a geek,and the fool just freaked
everytime he piss he end up wiping the seat,more left (OHHHHH!!!)
this aint battling this is called soul theft,youwriting for defeat
after that,you had a leg to stand on but my glock took it
laughter,now you beg to strand on hip-hop cuz you one footed
nah,i dont flatter,ya life is bagged in my bladder
aint you the faggot that said rhyming dont matter?
awww,did i go too hard,its just that ya flow aint so smart
hit you just like i throw dart,you get one shot,i dont negotiate B
not a fun spot,lose yourself if ya wont appreciate me

explanation:

IMPORTANT READ THE ENTIRE EXPLANATION BEFORE VOTING

first off read the verse twice and focus on all the bolds and colors and underlines and italic to get the rhymes right :sweating:

line1: im telling him to chill and not get surprised,a metaphor
line2: here the 1st personal and punchline,he lost to suicide in a battle and the wordplay/pun is on the form of suicide like getting his wrist and throat cut
line3: he disgusts me and i wont stop and im going in will full power,a metaphor
line4: punchline 2 or wordplay on switch which can also mean razor/knife/switch blade and that i wont stitch him/hurt him goes on explaining further with the second part of the line "though-darwer"
line5: he got scared cuz i threatened him so i am asking him a question? strife is a fight for winning in a war,and core is middle or base,another metaphor
line6: i answered my own q from the previous line,i told him that this is a demons plot,called him a dwee,and described the voice he made when he got scared
line7: called him a geek and further more insults
line8: girls cant hold pee in like us men,so im calling him a pussy cuz he pissed while sitting unintentionally,metaphor,and i told him more to come
line9: self explanatory
line10: start of a punchline,i shot him in one of his legs with a glock (pistol),so i took his leg by shooting it,metaphor
line11: strand on is kinda like land on,so he LANDED on hip hop (he is hip hoping cuz he got only one leg cuz i shot the other one therefore he one footed)also a personal because he a big hip hop fan,punchline and personal
line12: i dont flatter = i dont say nice stuff,i insult,a bladder is a bag to hold air,so his life is bagged with me,metaphor
line13: me and cream once argued in i dont know what thread and there he said that rhyming doesnt matter,personal
line14:making fun of him and calling him dumb,metaphor
lines15&16: these lines are personal and they are also wordplay and a punchline,he stated a lot of times that he doesnt appreciate Eminem's track "lose yourself" and in the tracks opening Em said "you get one shot" im playing on that by telling him he better lose himself if he doesnt appreciate me,kinda like how he doesnt appreciate the track lose yourself,punchline,wordplay,metaphor,personal
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Re: C.R.E.A.M v/s DA.

Postby Sam. » Aug 5th, '11, 12:38

Since DA had problems with the judging system there are new rules for this battle only

Multi's (3)
Personals (3)
Vocab/Complex (2)
Punchlines (2)
Flow (1)
Structure (1)
Others (1)

And 4 those who voted as the official judges in the last batlle with lello are not eligible to vote [just for fuck sake of being biased and shit] ,but if the participants want they can.

This is an open battle that means open votes ,judging on the votes that come i'll decide the "best to win" .
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Re: C.R.E.A.M v/s DA.

Postby Devil'sAdvocate » Aug 5th, '11, 12:46

no

SAM,VBV can vote

lello can vote too

everybody can vote
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Re: C.R.E.A.M v/s DA.

Postby Devil'sAdvocate » Aug 5th, '11, 12:56

Cream can judge my verse and i can judge his

so

some of the syllables in the rhyming just dont align at all

some (like a small amount) of the words dont even pass as slants

i liked the flow of the piece quite a lot

i think cream couldve went in with more content,other than calling me a wikker and all the stuff about lello,fair crooked i punch though

the shit that dont rhyme in cream's verse are

done fast/blood batch (could pass if enunciated with assonance)

fags a bug man/i'll burn him dont rhyme at all

pages/layer dont rhyme completley,only the first syllables can pass

nursery rhymes/murking yall while dont rhyme completley again,first syllable of "nur/mur" rhyme and "while/rhymes" COULD pass

face/play dont rhyme at all

people in his friend list/bleeding while bending dont rhyme at all

reading the verse/bleeded from some dont rhyme at all

those dont rhyme

i give cream a 3.5/5 for his verse,battle gon be close :y:
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Re: C.R.E.A.M v/s DA.

Postby Sam. » Aug 5th, '11, 13:11

added this .
but since both of you now what's good and bad no need to vote right. :facepalm
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Re: C.R.E.A.M v/s DA.

Postby Drug.Ballad » Aug 5th, '11, 13:27

Multi's (3) - DA
Personals (3) - Cream
Vocab/Complex (2) - Cream
Punchlines (2) - DA
Flow (1) - DA
Structure (1) - DA
Others (1) - N/A

7-5 to DA

The explanations are way too long, and shouldnt be needed all the time, people should be able to understand what your punchline is and what your getting at. I think they should only be explained for backing up personals or vocab, and maybe the odd punchline if its got several meanings.

@Cream, your structure was a little all over the place, some lines were too long, which made the flow a little off.

@DA, you needed more/better personals. But i liked the Suicide one.

Nice battle though. If it was the old voting system then it would have ended: 7-4 to DA. So switching the voting system didnt make a difference to my vote.
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Re: C.R.E.A.M v/s DA.

Postby Drug.Ballad » Aug 5th, '11, 13:28

C.R.E.A.M wrote:
he lost to suicide in a battle


I didn't lose that battle. It's still undecided, and I got the bigger number of votes so that line was meh.


lol i didnt catch that.
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Re: C.R.E.A.M v/s DA.

Postby Devil'sAdvocate » Aug 5th, '11, 13:37

C.R.E.A.M wrote:
he lost to suicide in a battle


I didn't lose that battle. It's still undecided, and I got the bigger number of votes so that line was meh.

i dont keep up with the shit that goes on a lot

i remember checking the battle thread and suicide was the one leading
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Re: C.R.E.A.M v/s DA.

Postby Suicide » Aug 5th, '11, 19:34

Multi's (3) - DA
Personals (3) - Cream
Vocab/Complex (2) - DA
Punchlines (2) -DA
Flow (1) - DA
Structure (1) - DA
Others (1) - Cream because I liked the cleverness of the polar bear line.

9-3 for DA.
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Re: C.R.E.A.M v/s DA.

Postby Devil'sAdvocate » Aug 5th, '11, 19:56

Geno wrote:I'm not gonna vote, but I'm just gonna say one thing.

Cream, your verse seemed really long. Your font was small and the lines still took over the space lol.

And both verses had rhymes that seemed forced. Like Creams use of "lawl" and DAs line:

seems not,this a demons plot,he a dweep,dude just squeaked
he living life as a geek,and the fool just freaked


I don't even get that. ^ lol. To me stuff like this just seems rushed, or lazy. Both of you said it was written in 15-20 minutes though, so it's cool. I'm just very particular with my rhymes and it just stuck out to me. :sweating:

whos verse do u think is better though?
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Re: C.R.E.A.M v/s DA.

Postby Devil'sAdvocate » Aug 5th, '11, 20:33

Geno wrote:I'd say Cream, because it had more personals and better multies, although it seemed way too long.

Structure could def. be better from both of you. One thing I don't get...why did you highlight the rhymes?

Creams rhyming was atrocious

he didnt rhyme what he think he rhymed

i like to highlight the rhymes,i didnt do it for any reason
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Re: C.R.E.A.M v/s DA.

Postby Devil'sAdvocate » Aug 5th, '11, 22:15

glock and hop rhyme

i could have put these apart,it really taking out small words like "you" "but" "my" or whatever

but look at the post i made about cream

and i obviously knew that they syallables dont align
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Re: C.R.E.A.M v/s DA.

Postby Spyder » Aug 7th, '11, 05:25

why would DA have a prob with the voting system?

multies worth more than punches? wtf kind of battles you do?

either way

multies - cream
personals - tie
punches - cream
flow - DA
structure - DA
complex - i guess DA
Other - NA

idk how u guys add that up but thats my vote

cream gotta align structure better bro, throws off the flow so much and just overall hurts appeal
but youll get there :shifty:
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Re: C.R.E.A.M v/s DA.

Postby Sam. » Aug 7th, '11, 11:49

few more and i'll close this battle . :D
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Re: C.R.E.A.M v/s DA.

Postby Sam. » Aug 9th, '11, 12:59

Multi's (3) da
Personals (3) tie
Vocab/Complex (2) cream
Punchlines (2) da
Flow (1) da
Structure (1) da
Others (1) cream had some well thought out lines .

C.R.E.A.M v/s DA
3-7
da

4-1

DA wins.
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