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Re: Successful Ft. Trey Songs

Postby Solace » Jan 17th, '10, 17:23

Also, I didn't mention this before but...There's something about the way you deliver that makes it sound so...average-joe like. It's a lot easier to relate to you. You don't sound like some hard gangsta whining you just sound like a dude talking about his life and it sounded good.
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Re: Successful Ft. Trey Songs

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 18th, '10, 11:40

i liked it man ,, beat is good ,, flow is good and delivery is sick , but it's da same to all tracks so it was boring a little ,, but it's still a good track ,,, :y:
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Re: Successful Ft. Trey Songs

Postby Enimee » Jan 18th, '10, 12:24

2 words, holy fuck

way to kill it chamberss def propz

liked the lyrically content and you flowed really well...the mixxin coulda used a lill work and some of the effects like echo's and such sounded a lil off at times
but still
SEX D track man reaaaal goood way to kill it
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Re: Successful Ft. Trey Songs

Postby Xray » Jan 18th, '10, 19:36

My feed is strictly about the lyrics, cause I haven't heard the track yet, I will soon though.

Wasn't really feeling the lyrics, it seemed like you weren't giving it your all. Kinda felt lazy and repetitive.
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^^That's a pussy thing to say. You shouldn't feel bad about people laughing at you and calling you names. If they come off as mean, you should retaliate with something meaner, and to be honest, in real life if someone called you names, you'd probably fight them for it. And that line doesn't suit you cause it makes you look like a weak pussy. You lack aggression in your rhymes, idk I feel as if you could of brought way more heat on this, because of the subject matter, but you didn't. This line however I really liked:
the ace of spades...king of heart...colder then planned//
so when life throws me flushes i ain't foldin my hand//
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Re: Successful Ft. Trey Songs

Postby Mr. Chambers » Jan 18th, '10, 20:33

Xray wrote:My feed is strictly about the lyrics, cause I haven't heard the track yet, I will soon though.

Wasn't really feeling the lyrics, it seemed like you weren't giving it your all. Kinda felt lazy and repetitive.
fuck beef....no point to even battle these fucks//
who get laughs off calling me an asshole and such//

^^That's a pussy thing to say. You shouldn't feel bad about people laughing at you and calling you names. If they come off as mean, you should retaliate with something meaner, and to be honest, in real life if someone called you names, you'd probably fight them for it. And that line doesn't suit you cause it makes you look like a weak pussy. You lack aggression in your rhymes, idk I feel as if you could of brought way more heat on this, because of the subject matter, but you didn't. This line however I really liked:
the ace of spades...king of heart...colder then planned//
so when life throws me flushes i ain't foldin my hand//


they're just words....i've been called everything in the book by my mom alone......and words don't phase me....the more you let them get to you....and the more you show that they get to you...the harder people go in on you....there's only a handful of things you can say to me that would actually cause me to swing at you....and for anyone who actually knows me...they'll vouch i'm not phased by words so much but actions...i've actually had to calm ppl down b4 because some1 would say some shit about me..and i'd be unphased while they'd be ready to kick they're ass....it just ain't my thing...
but tbh...i was speaking more so on rapping...and when you gain even the slightest amount of not fame...but recognition ...ppl wanna try to throw shots to get you down...so the couple of times ppl say something that actually reach me and i say something back or do a diss track...i look back and shake my head...


but maybe thats me..and i know everyone has different philosophies...but i just don't get affected by much as far as words....and as far as the lyrics..i mean to each his own...i personally disagree....i put alot of thought into my lyrics....but like i said...this is music..and how i come across on a track is completely up to the listener...and if you feel that way then maybe i need to reconsider my writing technique

but thanks for the feedback and opinions...i appreciate it
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Re: Successful Ft. Trey Songs

Postby Brownwall » Jan 18th, '10, 23:28

Dope track. Everything was on point: flow, delivery, proper lyrics. It was nice.
The only changes I might recommend, personally, would be lowering the vocal volume in the mix, and maybe decreasing the presence of the overdubs, but that's just me. Definitely a sick track.
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Re: Successful Ft. Trey Songs

Postby Mr. Chambers » Jan 19th, '10, 08:40

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Re: Successful Ft. Trey Songs

Postby i4ill » Jan 19th, '10, 12:06

that was tight man...Flow was nice, you ride that beat pretty well, I like slow flow patterns a lot. I thought the delivery was sweet, maybe more aggressiveness could have been great. Lyrically you're pretty skilled, your rhymes and vocabs were dope, I liked how the multies were integrated smoothly with the flow...
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Re: Successful Ft. Trey Songs

Postby RAB » Jan 19th, '10, 13:18

I thought the song was decent as a whole. Production could have been better, and the lyrics, while heartfelt, lacked depth and complexity. Enjoyed the rhyming mechanics of it all, just put more effort into writing the song next time. Just something that might help you down the line, don't interpret it as hate.
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Re: Successful Ft. Trey Songs

Postby Mr. Chambers » Jan 19th, '10, 17:40

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Re: Successful Ft. Trey Songs

Postby Arrinef » Jan 19th, '10, 17:43

pretty dope man
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Re: Successful Ft. Trey Songs

Postby Mr. Chambers » Jan 20th, '10, 18:07

good looks for listening arrine :y:
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Re: Successful Ft. Trey Songs

Postby Nick. Y » Jan 22nd, '10, 16:24

2nd and 3th verse's lyrics are pure heat, nice one homie
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Re: Successful Ft. Trey Songs

Postby Requiem » Jan 30th, '10, 03:06

i really like the lyrics on this, and ur flow is good. ur pronunciation's solid, but u sounded a little monotone in a little of it. good emotion during most of it tho.

dope :y:

and beat is waaay empty
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Re: Successful Ft. Trey Songs

Postby art_geek » Feb 4th, '10, 02:35

Pretty ill concept . . ur content is dope . . but you do seem a little bored on certain parts . . no hate just giving an opinion . . keep it up tho .
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