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Postby VenomBlackViper » Jul 26th, '11, 08:56

Possibly my best piece so far, i've been working on this for 3 weeks trying to just get it perfect, now i'm trying out a new style here which I feel is a lot better than my old style. So without further ado here it is:








































yung based pretty boy ken doll
hoes on my dick cuz i look like ed hall
u kno i stay posted in da hood boi, strapped wit dat AK
fiddy on ma dick, got me lookin like Kay Slay
i stay wit dat choppa on da block
ma tracks is like ass, drop it like its hot
so much fukkin swag, i shud be in a museum
da way i play da game, i shud be in a colosseum
ma raps is hot dawg, u kno u gotta see em
deez ni.ggaz from da union, i robert lee em
thats robert e lee for all u uneducated cats
he led the confederate army, his mens kept blades & gats
he lost da battle of gettysburg in 1863
aite im done typin dis, time to take a piss & leave
swag

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Re: VBV (aka Yung Lil Underage Ken Doll) - Choppa On Da Bloc

Postby Master Chief » Jul 26th, '11, 09:01

Too much of the multi-syllabic nerd shit going on. But a big improvement on your old shit.
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Re: VBV (aka Yung Lil Underage Ken Doll) - Choppa On Da Bloc

Postby mdemaz » Jul 26th, '11, 09:06

Too technical man..I don't know why you bother to rap like every other 2 bit multi junkie on this site..
Just be yourself.
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Re: VBV (aka Yung Lil Underage Ken Doll) - Choppa On Da Bloc

Postby Sam. » Jul 26th, '11, 11:15

inb4 embm :shifty:





































































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shit was good man i liked it and i read it like once and automatically i felt swagged out .
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Re: VBV (aka Yung Lil Underage Ken Doll) - Choppa On Da Bloc

Postby Alex2012 » Jul 26th, '11, 11:46

Sorry but I read several times and I still cannot get into it, maybe because I don't understand. For me the old were better.
I'm out of the matrix and I improved my music taste here, I opened my eyes and discovered so different ways to see the world, thanks to you all!

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Re: VBV (aka Yung Lil Underage Ken Doll) - Choppa On Da Bloc

Postby VenomBlackViper » Jul 26th, '11, 11:51

Alex2012 wrote:Sorry but I read several times and I still cannot get into it, maybe because I don't understand. For me the old were better.


Read these, then tell me if you honestly think my old work was better

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=116271

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=111945
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Re: VBV (aka Yung Lil Underage Ken Doll) - Choppa On Da Bloc

Postby Alex2012 » Jul 26th, '11, 12:12

VenomBlackViper wrote:
Alex2012 wrote:Sorry but I read several times and I still cannot get into it, maybe because I don't understand. For me the old were better.


Read these, then tell me if you honestly think my old work was better

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=116271

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=111945



it was perfect, it gives me chills. It's only you to write like that, where's the problem? :unsure:
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Re: VBV (aka Yung Lil Underage Ken Doll) - Choppa On Da Bloc

Postby VenomBlackViper » Jul 26th, '11, 12:24

So... you're telling me to stick with my new style & completely abandon my old style, right? :unsure:
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Re: VBV (aka Yung Lil Underage Ken Doll) - Choppa On Da Bloc

Postby mdemaz » Jul 26th, '11, 12:28

Yeah...VBV really fell off with his gay ass swag raps back then..But now he's just trying to do forced storytelling and random multis with no personality..This piece is too nerdy and technical..It only appeals to elitist fucks that do album reviews in the most hypocritical way.

Allmusic would be cumming in their pants if they saw this.
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Re: VBV (aka Yung Lil Underage Ken Doll) - Choppa On Da Bloc

Postby Alex2012 » Jul 26th, '11, 12:33

VenomBlackViper wrote:So... you're telling me to stick with my new style & completely abandon my old style, right? :unsure:


No, the comment above was for what you asked me to read, OK, I prefer your old style. :y:
I'm out of the matrix and I improved my music taste here, I opened my eyes and discovered so different ways to see the world, thanks to you all!

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Re: VBV (aka Yung Lil Underage Ken Doll) - Choppa On Da Bloc

Postby classthe_king » Jul 26th, '11, 15:19

I'm glad my new style has finally influenced you
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Re: VBV (aka Yung Lil Underage Ken Doll) - Choppa On Da Bloc

Postby Block » Jul 26th, '11, 17:04

ehhh...

Ken doll / ed hall?

I would have went with Ed Sulliven. Much more influential. And the rhyme would have been much better. Although I think you can learn something by reading the feed already given.


PS Check the Mac Lethal video I posted in HHD. He went based. It's hilarious. The title of the thread is "For Derdy"
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Re: VBV (aka Yung Lil Underage Ken Doll) - Choppa On Da Bloc

Postby VenomBlackViper » Jul 26th, '11, 17:24

:laughing: @ shoulda went with Ed Sullivan, I don't think I can purposely rhyme that bad even if I tried. I'm not Based enough yet. :(

Damn I had to go the third page to find that thread, nikkas out here sleeping on the real shit.

Block & Class feed my real new piece: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=120196

Alex are you actually convinced this is my real new style? :laughing:
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Re: VBV (aka Yung Lil Underage Ken Doll) - Choppa On Da Bloc

Postby ArsheyHaq » Jul 27th, '11, 07:06

LMAO! You were just playin' around and were still better than most of this board haha Sucks though that people jump at feeding these pointless posts, but not the good ones like our latest collab 'Throwaway The Trash' featuring you and me (plug, plug).
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Re: VBV (aka Yung Lil Underage Ken Doll) - Choppa On Da Bloc

Postby Alex2012 » Jul 27th, '11, 10:02

VenomBlackViper wrote::laughing: @ shoulda went with Ed Sullivan, I don't think I can purposely rhyme that bad even if I tried. I'm not Based enough yet. :(

Damn I had to go the third page to find that thread, nikkas out here sleeping on the real shit.

Block & Class feed my real new piece: http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic. ... 4&t=120196

Alex are you actually convinced this is my real new style? :laughing:



I had a doubt and I put a comment just to know, and the worst is when you pretended to take an interest in what I said, now I don't know what to say except that I only want to kill you.

@ArsheyHaq, I put a comment on "Throwaway The Trash ', but I confess I had not much to say.
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