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Manîx [Track One - Infamous Lp]

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Manîx [Track One - Infamous Lp]

Postby Man1x » Sep 18th, '11, 15:31

"Manîx"

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[Intro]

<Jail Warden>

Five minutes then your time up on the phone is up….

<Dial Tone>

<Manîx>

Pick up your phone…. you know you can't leave me. YOU NEED ME, WAKE UP, I'M STILL HERE. WAKE UP!!!!


<Alarm Clock>

[Hook - Eminememy]

I can't control the rage/
His growing pace will blow the cage/
I can't control the rage/
I can feel a slow enragement, drove to hate/
I can't control the rage/
A grove of hate, my life's a show of fate/
I can't control the rage/
I can't control the rage/

[Verse 1 - Eminememy (Regular) & Manîx (Bold)]

Without this ability to rhyme you'd have seen me die/
Risked my nobility with my scheming crimes/
Kissed by his pity, God sent me a dream, a life/
Missed the rope, really I'm glad i didn't keep my strife/
Keep the dice, no longer breathing pride, ceased my lies/
Now I lead a life because I had decided to teach my kind/
Bliss has freed my mind to realize that peace is mine/
Didn't freeze in my depressed sleep and breeze through time/
Keeping time on my mind, I realized I was consumed by hate/
My looming fate had me fuming, gazing, zoomed in late/
On rules at face, need to cage my hate cause I'll rage and flame/
Grace this page of life, slay my rage with pride, sage of this gay rap game/
"Say my name."AHH, stay encaged! "You'll break, my slave!/
Soon you'll rape the names you hate and engage my face/
I'll break and chase you!!" NOOO! "Drape the windows in blood/
Your pinned in and shoved, force feed the sins of this love/
Help me my kin from above! "I'm not bad, I live to make fun."/
Spare me, be done! "Nah, let us be one, shit, come give me a hug"/

[Hook - Eminememy]

I can't control the rage/
His growing pace will blow the cage/
I can't control the rage/
I can feel a slow enragement, drove to hate/
I can't control the rage/
A grove of hate, my life's a show of fate/
I can't control the rage/
I CAN'T CONTROL THE RAGE, AHHHH/

[Outro - Eminememy (Regular) & Manîx (Bold)]

We are ONE!!!

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Re: Manîx

Postby SG. » Sep 18th, '11, 15:48

Did you happen to kill Manix in the past by any chance?

Just kidding, great as always, good concept. Is there more of this Eminememy/Manix tussling in the LP?
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Re: Manîx

Postby Man1x » Sep 18th, '11, 15:58

Ahhh, so you caught the My Darling influence haha. And I on't think there will be any struggle any more, the rest is going be Manix, he kinda got rid of Eminememy. This is the only track that will seem influenced by Eminem besides the serial killing topics from here to there.
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Re: Manîx

Postby Man1x » Sep 18th, '11, 18:49

Thanks Cream, I'll hit ya back
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Re: Manîx [Track One - Infamous Lp]

Postby Man1x » Sep 18th, '11, 19:12

Cover added.
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Re: Manîx [Track One - Infamous Lp]

Postby Sam. » Sep 18th, '11, 20:02

:worship:
That's the spirit man ,this is really dope .You did well in all departments .No criticism came to my mind after reading this .Keep at it .
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Re: Manîx [Track One - Infamous Lp]

Postby Man1x » Sep 18th, '11, 20:13

Thanks Sam! :y:
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Re: Manîx [Track One - Infamous Lp]

Postby Mr.DGAF » Sep 18th, '11, 20:24

My favorite piece from you easily so far. The rhyming and concept is awesome. I know you said you changed your name to start with a clean slate writing wise. Well, keep this up. Because if this is a sign of what's to come, you're gonna be getting a lot better.
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How many truths you can hide in flows

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Re: Manîx [Track One - Infamous Lp]

Postby Man1x » Sep 18th, '11, 20:28

Thanks, I really hope I replicate and improve from this point. I get that feeling after every verse.
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Re: Manîx [Track One - Infamous Lp]

Postby Man1x » Sep 19th, '11, 19:11

Bump
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Re: Manîx [Track One - Infamous Lp]

Postby Man1x » Sep 20th, '11, 03:56

Thanks bro, means a lot coming from you. And I'm picky about my art haha, I search and think long and hard before I put it on here. If you want I can make some for you, just give me a picture. I can't do costume though I am horrible at any art not music, but I have an eye for it. No one noticed the deep meaning behind my infamous covers though.
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Re: Manîx [Track One - Infamous Lp]

Postby Man1x » Sep 20th, '11, 04:12

Yea, no problem. Give me a topic and general idea of what you want or give me a picture and I'll make it happen by the Weekend or earlier, probably tomorrow
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Re: Manîx [Track One - Infamous Lp]

Postby Man1x » Sep 20th, '11, 21:31

bump..
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Re: Manîx [Track One - Infamous Lp]

Postby Sam. » Sep 21st, '11, 14:18

Man1x wrote:bump..

FYI you need to feed other pieces to get back feed .
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Re: Manîx [Track One - Infamous Lp]

Postby Man1x » Sep 21st, '11, 19:13

Sam. wrote:
Man1x wrote:bump..

FYI you need to feed other pieces to get back feed .


I do that on weekends when I have time too, I'm just hoping I get lucky
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