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CrashBand vs Trimss

CrashBand vs Trimss

Postby Spyder » Jul 25th, '13, 02:06

CrashBand
Beat

Yo Spy, I guess I can muster up a diss
But to be honest, I can’t really be fucked with this
Cos bro, even you must admit
If you had to write about Trimss, it would be just as shit
Well, at least you would win, I could give a fuck less
I looked up his mum’s dress, and she was recently Trimmed!
And that nose of his, it’s one hell of a shape
Trimms, when you stop to smell flowers, are they afraid?
* yaaawn *…. You guys bored already?
Then go and act like his personals aren’t forced and petty
and give him the points and say “It was so close,
but all Crash really brought was yo mom and nose jokes”
Thats true, but these jokes are now hard to replace
'cos it looks like a bus has parked on your face
So give him the win, claim you remained impartial
I'm all good, he looks like Sid.... from Hey Arnold


Trimss
Im King of the Domain so I'll start with the lame jokes
bitch has Slik's dick*0 so far in his mouth he may choke,
I'll grab you by the throat and make my blade holy*1
Mine's broke so I'll take yours and make you say sorry
Crash your glass house with my mad mouth and shake your feet*2
you dropped Ray's soap, I guess Crashband-is-screwed
An ugly fool, that's why the mask on your face is huge*3
Mister average we'll forget about your ass today
Asked people for infos but it's mad insane
No one even knows who's that bitch made guy*4
I'll fucking rape him with Bigray's mic
my rhymes went over your head.. like slik's hairline*5
Wow, Trimss ain't nice and if you hate his unfair lines
and get bored to sleep you better pray he spares lifes
So you can go to rest but Crash you should never forget
Sleep is only a step closer to death

*0: Slik and Crash are the best couple on TR
*1&2: He's a huge fan of Atmosphere
*3: http://static.comicvine.com/uploads/ori ... -crash.png
*4: No one knows shit about him, he's forgettable
*5: Slik threw shots at me so I thought I'd retaliate
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Re: CrashBand vs Trimss

Postby CrashBand » Jul 25th, '13, 10:53

Lol @ No one even knows this guy*



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I'm not tryin to be rude, but I sincerely wanna fuck the taste out of your mouth
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Re: CrashBand vs Trimss

Postby Spyder » Jul 25th, '13, 17:34

Gotta disagree with you man

Explaining bars is a must, as crash did it with the links as well. (Unless you just hate it at the bottom, then OK) but I do it too, some people would have missed a personal, or not got a punch, but be to lazy to research, and there goes a high points category.

Also crash had zero personals, like he made a point of not trying, he states all he had was nose jokes...
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Re: CrashBand vs Trimss

Postby Trimss » Jul 25th, '13, 17:35

Amadeo wrote:Here's what I didn't like about Trimss's verse:

- He explained his bars at the end


Well, to be fair.. Spyder told me that having annotations is better because I sent it without them at first. (I think he can confirm it)

Amadeo wrote:- Generic gay jokes and references to dropping the soap


Just like there are generic "ugly" jokes in Crashband's diss.. However I agree with you, I honestly wasn't very inspired and knew very little about him so gay jokes were all I could come up with.

Amadeo wrote:- You're going to make him say "sorry" for you taking his blade...seems like a forced set-up. You should have placed this set-up before the Atmosphere line (which was the punchline but it wasn't insulting at all, it was just an empty reference)


Yep, I understand.

Amadeo wrote:- Crush his glass house with your mad mouth? What the fuck? Yes, it's an Atmosphere reference, but it makes no sense. "Mad" is a ridiculous adjective for someone's mouth. Shake his feet?


I'll be honest right there, I couldn't be bothered to find a good rhyme at all. That line is pure filler and stupid.

Amadeo wrote:- Ehhh...you could have done more with the "Crash Bandicoot" name flip. The mask on the face = ugly idea was good (not that I've even seen him), but not executed well. Even something simple like "Look at his ugly mug, did someone stab it with blades?/Someone tell Crash Bandicoot to keep the mask on his face" would have worked better.


Can't argue with that.
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Re: CrashBand vs Trimss

Postby Spyder » Jul 25th, '13, 21:11

3 Punches - Eh.... Crash cause some shit made me laugh
3 Personals - Ehhh Trimss. as he himself stated, Crash only brought nose jokes
2 multies - Crash, more long streams and better flowing
1 flow - Crash
1 structure - tie idc
1 vocab/complexity - Crash, had some scheme switches gave him complex for that

battle wasnt that great really. i told him to explain bars cause i literally got nothing he said when he sent it, without them i promise no one would have understood that "mask line".
Crash im pretty sure wrote this in five seconds, cause he said he hadnt started, then sent it the same night sooo. i knew the personals would lack and it showed. that being said trimss wasnt that great.
i think Crash has been watching enough Dont Flop that some comedy soaked in, some parts made me chuckle so i gave him punches. some decent streams of multies, and some scheme switches.

so crash gets this battle for me 8-4
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Re: CrashBand vs Trimss

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jul 25th, '13, 21:47

(3)Punches - Close, I'll go Crash
(3)Personals - hmmmmm. Trimss by a nose (hehe)
(2)Multies - Crash
(1)Flow - Ehh, Crash
(1)Structure - Crash
(1)Vocab/complexity - Tie

8-4 as well, Crash.

I gave Trimss the personals because of the attempted name flip and mask line/slik line. Honestly, the Slik's hairline bar was one of my favorite parts of the battle. But in terms of writing, it goes to crash because I think he's just naturally a better writer. Nothing really great about the battle, crash's verse had some really funny moments, the Hey Arnold reference killed me. Also appreciated he addresses the lack of personals he was bringing and all, made it seem self aware that he was purposely going a different route.

Trimss, you had some nice ideas man. You just gotta work on your execution a bit. If you could've set some of these bars and punches up better it would've been a tighter battle. Some of your punches are nice in thought but you just put them there, so they end up hitting flat. Just work on delivery dude.
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Re: CrashBand vs Trimss

Postby Spyder » Jul 25th, '13, 22:00

2-0 at least one more
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Re: CrashBand vs Trimss

Postby Sam. » Jul 25th, '13, 22:04

(3)Punches - >Crash
(3)Personals - >Trimss
(2)Multies - >Crash
(1)Flow - >Crash
(1)Structure - Pass
(1)Vocab/complexity - Crash

Trimms vs Crash

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Crash lands to victory.
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Re: CrashBand vs Trimss

Postby Trimss » Jul 25th, '13, 22:08

Good job man!
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Re: CrashBand vs Trimss

Postby Spyder » Jul 25th, '13, 22:08

3-0

anymore need to be said can do so in the main thread
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