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Closer Now (ft. TripleNineThree)

Postby Eedee » Aug 29th, '14, 00:56

LoF: viewtopic.php?f=38&t=173158&p=2768630#p2768630

New song off my new album. Hope you enjoy :y:

https://soundcloud.com/eedeemusic/close ... eninethree

Eedee ft. TripleNineThree
CLOSER NOW
(Prod. by Sean Divine)

[Hook]
Can you show me what it's all about?
Do you hear me when I'm calling out?
See the lights dim lower,
I really need you closer now... (x2)

[Verse 1: TripleNineThree]
I promised that I wouldn't do it
Same sin again it's like it's all consuming
Will I ever win? It went from a nuisance
To an addiction and now I'm fighting through this
So I cry out, Lord do you hear me?
I need rest I can't even see clearly
I breath death covered in my own vomit
I keep on returning but really, I don't want it!
Yet I'm not stopping, I mean I try to fight it
But when I look around there's no one that I can confide in
Why are you quiet? Feel like I'm slowing dying
Lord you know I'm crying I'm so alone inside and
I need you closer now to come and make my soul alive
I've been crying out for years but you don't reply
Father Addonai, the same way Adam died
I know that you forbid it, and yet I grab the lie
That if I gratify my flesh I'll be satisfied
But really I keep grabbing at my death while I try sin
That's the story of our race as the lights dim
But the glory of grace is when we find Him

[Hook]
Can you show me what it's all about?
Do you hear me when I'm calling out?
See the lights dim lower,
I really need you closer now... (x2)

[Verse 2: Eedee]
I promised that I wouldn't do it...
I'm being honest, and this is what I put in music.
I see the night sky, I'm feelin' close now,
I didn't realize it was cold out.
My head turns till my neck hurts,
I said words can't describe, the reply
That I get when I see my breath
Ever so misted, we try
Better go witness
The moments so slow only to pass us by
I'm askin' why the passion I have
Is overloaded in the circuits that you skate
And the purpose that we make
Is that it's easy when you see the routine the moon makes
Usin' excuses loosely for one more lap in a used place, well, touche.
You make a big deal out of nothing but gas and dust
And then the magic comes and voila, exactly us.
And that's what happens when you're runnin' laps
Break gravity with a thunder clap, and I ain't comin' back.
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Re: Closer Now (ft. TripleNinethree)

Postby Snakebeast » Aug 29th, '14, 01:03

Fantastic verses from both of you. Love the beat as well.

My only problem is when Eedee went a tiny bit off-beat here:

I see the night sky, I'm feelin' close now,
My head turns till my neck hurts,


Aside from that, it's great.
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Re: Closer Now (ft. TripleNinethree)

Postby Jaba » Aug 29th, '14, 01:15

Nice song. T93 Good verse. Eedee, great as usual.
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You thought I was lyin' when I said I think that I'm crossin' the line again
I've lost my mind, caution oh God I think I've just thought of another fucking line
Forgive me father, for I have sinned
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Re: Closer Now (ft. TripleNinethree)

Postby Tash8 » Aug 29th, '14, 01:21

Snakebeast wrote:My only problem is when Eedee went a tiny bit off-beat here:

I see the night sky, I'm feelin' close now,
My head turns till my neck hurts,


Aside from that, it's great.


I dont think he went off beat...my neck hurts goes with the same flow as I said words, both sped up a little bit. Maybe if you kept going with that flow for a line more it would have been more obvious but honestly i thought it sounded nice.

Good wrk...the beat is epic for such a calm beat haha. Triple great delivery and emotion man.


Edit: snakebeast I think hear what you're saying now, It almost feels like its got an extra syllable
My head turns till my neck hurts,
I said words
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Re: Closer Now (ft. TripleNinethree)

Postby TripleNineThree » Aug 29th, '14, 03:20

Thanks everyone for the feedback! :y:
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Re: Closer Now (ft. TripleNineThree)

Postby Tranquil » Aug 29th, '14, 09:44

Eedee - Love the delivery and lyrics, the flow kind of got me off guard a little bit though, it took me a couple of listens to get use to it.

TripleNineThree - Fantastic delivery, great lyrics and great flow. Couldn't pick any flaws out in your verse, ad-libs and everything were just spot on!

All in all though, you's both done the beat justice and made a killer track together! :worship:
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Re: Closer Now (ft. TripleNineThree)

Postby TripleNineThree » Aug 29th, '14, 13:49

Basedshady wrote:Eedee putting out more christian rap, eh?

Your verse was fine though buddy, was cringing at every layered line over that other fucker's.


Lol!!! And they say Christians are intolerant. :facepalm
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Re: Closer Now (ft. TripleNineThree)

Postby TripleNineThree » Aug 29th, '14, 15:11

Point proven.

If you would like to debate religion, the Audio Stage is not the proper area for it. Thanks for the feedback anyways.
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Re: Closer Now (ft. TripleNineThree)

Postby TripleNineThree » Aug 29th, '14, 20:33

Thanks Wiz! I just talked to Eedee and I think we are going to start working on another collab with the concept along the lines of the beauty and power of music just to let you know! :y:
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Re: Closer Now (ft. TripleNineThree)

Postby Jaba » Aug 31st, '14, 03:43

TripleNineThree wrote:
Basedshady wrote:Eedee putting out more christian rap, eh?

Your verse was fine though buddy, was cringing at every layered line over that other fucker's.


Lol!!! And they say Christians are intolerant. :facepalm

Pretty sure he was just kidding around....
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I've lost my mind, caution oh God I think I've just thought of another fucking line
Forgive me father, for I have sinned
But hip hop has left me brainwashed with a violent streak
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Re: Closer Now (ft. TripleNineThree)

Postby Josh » Aug 31st, '14, 14:36

:y: :y:
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Re: Closer Now (ft. TripleNineThree)

Postby TripleNineThree » Sep 3rd, '14, 00:54

@joshimura - Thanks for the feedback!
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Re: Closer Now (ft. TripleNineThree)

Postby SliK » Oct 6th, '14, 03:58

TripleNineThree wrote:Point proven.

If you would like to debate religion, the Audio Stage is not the proper area for it. Thanks for the feedback anyways.

I remember what happened last time you tried debating religion. It was with class, in case you don't remember.

Religious people don't want to debate, they want to deliver sermons and educate us in the ways of GAWD.

BTW the song sucks.
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Re: Closer Now (ft. TripleNineThree)

Postby TripleNineThree » Oct 11th, '14, 15:55

Thank Menzo and thanks everyone else for the feedback so far! :y:
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Re: Closer Now (ft. TripleNineThree)

Postby Eedee » Oct 12th, '14, 01:55

TripleNineThree wrote:Thank Menzo and thanks everyone else for the feedback so far! :y:


Song sucks, and you suck. :y:



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