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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Dec 19th, '06, 01:56

i clicked on who it is :D

mr nation :smoking:

lol it think


structure is......bad that needs work

rythm are better still not complex

flow is ok when you look at the structure
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Postby Mr. Cookie » Dec 19th, '06, 02:00

Bar wrote:i clicked on who it is :D

mr nation :smoking:

lol it think


structure is......bad that needs work

rythm are better still not complex

flow is ok when you look at the structure


Wrong...that ain't me...
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Dec 19th, '06, 02:02

Mr. Nation wrote:
Bar wrote:i clicked on who it is :D

mr nation :smoking:

lol it think


structure is......bad that needs work

rythm are better still not complex

flow is ok when you look at the structure


Wrong...that ain't me...


i guessed coz you talking bout getting a mic :laughing:
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Postby Mr. Cookie » Dec 19th, '06, 02:05

naw man...I got other shit...
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Postby ThomasAguanis » Dec 19th, '06, 04:28

nicely done. I recognize the style in a way so I'm pretty sure I know who it is. They did good and I still see improvements they made. Glad to see they're still writing :D :8)

and it cant be a guy...unless a guy would say:
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for best chick who can throw a fist /
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Postby Enimee » Dec 20th, '06, 21:06

wasnt great....why you postin fer other people?
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Postby $0 R3@L » Jan 20th, '07, 03:35

its angie i think,shes a gurl and she cant post nuttin....she even tried hiding the scent wit a random post :shifty: lmao

ayway its good and fairly complex in ways....not bad use of words ive seen much worse in that tr tournament lmao
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jan 20th, '07, 16:53

Killa wrote:
$0 R3@L wrote:its angie i think,shes a gurl and she cant post nuttin....she even tried hiding the scent wit a random post :shifty: lmao

ayway its good and fairly complex in ways....not bad use of words ive seen much worse in that tr tournament lmao


agree with real

plus it IS angie :whistle: sarah only ever posts these around the same time angie is online lol


this was posted ages ago :sweating:
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