Immortal Powers

[Tash8]

my unique flow is an earthquake stimulating minds, jesus-like beast came to simulate mankind
a decedent of god with kids who emulate my rhymes acting like my spirit is a goddess's design
but the truth remains i'm godless nor devine, creating emotional lyrics for the brothers to define
but really speaking i'm a lyricist not a saint, discharging lines like a principle expelling who complain
no brothers to compell me to restrain, none would tell me to refrain from using my powers like game

wrote in about 10 min

Please feed

[4D]

I like it man, cool that you're still working on the meta and similes. This is your best so far n my opinion. interesting too that you made the font smaller to make the lines longer, i`m squintingmy ass off, but it's a different idea, and i`m all for trying new things. I like you're second line the most, just the word use in it or something, clicks with me. Nice job, keep it up Tash!

[Tash8]

thanks man yea i'm trying to work on everything, taking baby steps to get to you guys level, if that ever happens

but yea thx for feed

btw i like my second line the most because of this

a decedent of god with kids who emulate my rhymes acting like my spirit is a goddess's design

i think that the multi being in a different place made it sound a bit more unique and different compared to the usual stuff.

[Tash8]

bump?

[Tash8]

feed mothafucking cocksucking bitches...

but of course i'm not talking about you, if your feeding

[James R.]

Pretty good shit. Nice vocab in this one made for some decent rhymes homie. Keep at it, I can already see some improvement coming from this.

[Tash8]

Pretty good shit. Nice vocab in this one made for some decent rhymes homie. Keep at it, I can already see some improvement coming from this.

thanks a lot man

[4D]

thanks man yea i'm trying to work on everything, taking baby steps to get to you guys level, if that ever happens

but yea thx for feed

btw i like my second line the most because of this

a decedent of god with kids who emulate my rhymes acting like my spirit is a goddess's design

i think that the multi being in a different place made it sound a bit more unique and different compared to the usual stuff.

Yes you are correct man, that was your best line, that one surprised me, it was nicely put. I thought I'd already said that was your best line in my post, that's weird.

[Tash8]

^ yea haha u did, i just told you why it might have been ur fav out of them lol

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yeh nice work man, keep it up