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random rap i wrote. check it!

Postby soperman005 » Oct 28th, '07, 22:38

i snort cocaine just to warp my brain
ignore my pain wit drugs, i dont wanna mourn today
a horrible way to cope but i warn you mayne
you gonna pop you better eat an orange for taste
an a less boring day youll have
ur high as shit, yeah! now do the math
ima set a booby trap, just to fuel my wrath
i spew my rap, and i only spit the truth and fact
let me let you know that i rep the grove
got the eg flow wit some extra coke
i guess you know that im a fucking boss
ill bust one off, get my id and cut the rock
i tear people apart wit a real sharp
steamin' fart that'll prolly leave a scar
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Re: random rap i wrote. check it!

Postby city » Nov 14th, '07, 00:46

yo that was hott son. props :y:
Windows tintied on my ride when i drive in it
so when i rob a bank, run and just dive in it
so i'll be disquised in it
and if anybody identifies the guy get it
i'll hide for five minutes
come back, shoot the eye witness
fire at the private eye hired to pry in my bussines
Die b*tches, bastards, brats, pets
this puppy's lucky i aint blast his *ss yet

I'm a CRIMINAL

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Postby Requiem » Nov 15th, '07, 05:28

nice flow :y:
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Postby Steve Spag » Nov 15th, '07, 18:04

The flow was a little off in some parts the way I read it, but it was good. I liked the rhyme scheme for it and how you just went off, lol. Good stuff, check my "Poetry's Finest" and let me know what you think. :y:
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Postby lostdaze18 » Nov 15th, '07, 19:47

I really liked it and i think it had a good flow :)
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