Ego ft. D. Dubs - I'll Do Me

[CrashBand]

Firstly, flow was on point! it went so smoothly for me over that beat

You guys have great chemistry on tracks together, would be great to hear menzo and geno verses audio too


Loved the rhyme scheme of the first four bars of Ego's verse probably my favourite bars of the peice (I liked the idea of the 'robbed emotions' in those bars too haha)

on menzo's verse, thanks for the tip to speed that line up, i definitely tripped there the first time I went over it

thought it was a very solid verse, I think it might be my accent but i found the metal wings rhyme was a little forced. Other then that multis were awesome
and yeah vocab, I didnt even know what the fuck sequestrate is haha
I liked the "no future-write like no tomrw' line

finally d.dubs verse. I think im too late to hear the audio which sucks, dope verse though.
rhyming and flow were great, i feel personally the blunt wordplay you use is a little overused but i thought you executed it.

yeah, dont really know who took this one out sorry guys..

[overgrown]

Or hit fast play and let it all flash away,
A pathway where facts pay me back only halfway

tight. i like the flow of that

[overgrown]

quote:

When you say "overcome the odds" I just focus on the job,
Pokin' at you sobs, when you talk, until it blows back,
Emotions almost robbed from all the locust I done stopped,
Rollin' to the top, through the fog, like I smoked that,

i reread this prolly ten times. at first i was like aight its basically poem structure rhyming every other line. kinda long lines and for me it just wasnt flowing. but then eminems "bully" is basically a limerick and it would prolly look unflowable if cold read so i dont know. i give u props for trying different structures.
but then the flow of inner "o" rhymes caught my eye and i was like there all multiples. or close.

focus on the job,
Pokin' at you sobs,
Emotions almost robbed
locust I done stopped,
Rollin' to the top,

to b honest i still think the back/that end rhyme still throw the flow but what u got goin on with the inner rhymes is some complex thinking. keep at that.


i jus quick i also liked this from the next verse...

’ve warned with plenty patience, I’m right where I belong so
I have no future so I’ll write like no tomorrow

like the feel of.. belong so/tomorrow

[overgrown]

quote:

When you say "overcome the odds" I just focus on the job,
Pokin' at you sobs, when you talk, until it blows back,
Emotions almost robbed from all the locust I done stopped,
Rollin' to the top, through the fog, like I smoked that,

i reread this prolly ten times. at first i was like aight its basically poem structure rhyming every other line. kinda long lines and for me it just wasnt flowing. but then eminems "bully" is basically a limerick and it would prolly look unflowable if cold read so i dont know. i give u props for trying different structures.
but then the flow of inner "o" rhymes caught my eye and i was like there all multiples. or close.

focus on the job,
Pokin' at you sobs,
Emotions almost robbed
locust I done stopped,
Rollin' to the top,

to b honest i still think the back/that end rhyme still throw the flow but what u got goin on with the inner rhymes is some complex thinking. keep at that.


i jus quick i also liked this from the next verse...

’ve warned with plenty patience, I’m right where I belong so
I have no future so I’ll write like no tomorrow

like the feel of.. belong so/tomorrow

[CrashBand]

^first part flowed flawlessly I thought

..A..A
..A..B
..A..A
..A..B ??

Just rapped it again and it flowed so smoothly sets you up for the verse

[CrashBand]

No worries

Feed my latest potentially?

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

Wow, Awesome guys!! Some of that content is better than famous rappers out there in my opinion. I also really liked the ABAB at the beginning!

Keep it up guys!