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Re: Bigray - Cocky

Postby Francesco » Jun 8th, '13, 02:40

Structure your pieces a little better & sharpen your rhymes a bit little homie... rather than that a good piece overall. I liked the content & the passion... :y: You've been heavy for the last couple of weeks or so!
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Re: Bigray - Cocky

Postby Sam. » Jun 8th, '13, 21:14

Structure sucked lol. Thankfully the flow wasn't that much affected by it. I could imagine a slow pace flow for this. Content was, well distinguished, unique to say the least. You kinda went west-coast with it. If you truly want to learn about structure, you should read pieces by Ego and Spyder. They are really good at it. Also, work on your Multis and try and use different words to rhyme.
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Re: Bigray - Cocky

Postby Snakebeast » Jun 9th, '13, 19:03

I liked the structure, actually....until line 15-16, where the bars got drastically shorter. The rhymes were simple, but it was easy to find the flow at it. And, as Sam said, try to use more multis. It adds more dimensions to your verses.
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Re: Bigray - Cocky

Postby Francesco » Jun 10th, '13, 13:56

bigray wrote:Thanks guys for the feed...spit this with the beamer Benz n Bentley beat it will flow nicely on that beat.


Ok that's even more like it... :worship:
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Re: Bigray - Cocky

Postby Sam. » Jun 10th, '13, 19:31

bigray wrote:Thanks guys for the feed...spit this with the beamer Benz n Bentley beat it will flow nicely on that beat.

You should have mentioned it before hand, haha. :p
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