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*Lightwork* ... Can Yall Even Match This???

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*Lightwork* ... Can Yall Even Match This???

Postby J Roc » Feb 11th, '08, 02:09

QUIT ACTIN! Fore CLIPS BLAST AN Ya "Chest Exposed" Like Some CHICKS FLASHIN !
IT HAPPENS! J-Cock-Da-Nines An Leave Ya Face-"Modified" Like SICK GRAPHICS !!
All You PIFF ADDICTS TALKIN IT OUT. When Da HAWK TO YA MOUTH Youll Turn SOFT AS A COUCH !
So FUCK YOU SORE HATERS! Better-Love Cause U Never-"BUST" LIKE FORE-PLAYERS !!
J SHOOTIN DA SLUGS At-Tops. All U Wacks-Lost. An'll Only "Crack-Roc" DOIN THA DRUG !!
DUDE IS A THUG? U Clever-Nerds "Never-Learn" Like STUDENTS WIT DRUGS !!

....... *Lights Up a Blunt* ....... Haha Aiight Im Done
Last edited by J Roc on Feb 16th, '08, 03:03, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: *Lightwork* ... Can Yall Even Match This???

Postby liljon » Feb 11th, '08, 03:08

ha ha that was good but i would of said this...All You PIFF ADDICTS TALKIN IT OUT. When theres a fucking cock in YA MOUTH Youll Turn SOFT AS A COUCH) lmao hahahaha naw yours is better
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Re: *Lightwork* ... Can Yall Even Match This???

Postby Ka0t1c » Feb 11th, '08, 08:45

that's a great improvement, still needs work tho, keep it up, thats the stuff i like to read in terms of rhyming style... :y: :y:
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: *Lightwork* ... Can Yall Even Match This???

Postby J Roc » Feb 11th, '08, 20:00

Lol Thanks For Tha Feed Guys :wave:
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Re: *Lightwork* ... Can Yall Even Match This???

Postby ichunez » Feb 11th, '08, 22:14

nice lines..buh u need lessons :confusion:

pm me for tips :)
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Re: *Lightwork* ... Can Yall Even Match This???

Postby J Roc » Feb 11th, '08, 22:44

Lol Nah .... Why Dont U Post "Tips" Here ;)
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Re: *Lightwork* ... Can Yall Even Match This???

Postby Arabian Shady » Feb 12th, '08, 08:53

THAT WAS SICK MAN,WELL WRITTEN
gd flow n rhymes, :y:
peace

can you feed mine its called UNTITLED
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Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
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