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Crimson And Clover

Postby Oguchi » Aug 27th, '11, 20:53

A song I wrote called Crimson And Clover.
I know the singing isn't great but I'd be grateful for feedback on the lyrics, delivery etc.
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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rp0hkFo_1J4

Feedback link: http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=38&t=123542&start=15
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Re: Crimson And Clover

Postby Solace » Aug 28th, '11, 16:12

Tbh, you have really bad quality. It sounds like you recorded with a camera or something. You sure you can't get a better mic? Your flow was on point most of the time, rare slip ups here and there. Your singing was alright. Delivery is okay. I can't comment much since I can't fully hear you. Work on getting better quality bruh, you'll get there. I love Sufjan Steven's "The Dress Looks Nice On You" so the highlight of this track for me was instrumental choice. Remember choosing the beat correctly is as important as any other aspect in rap. :y:
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Re: Crimson And Clover

Postby Oguchi » Aug 28th, '11, 18:33

Thanks a lot for the feedback man, yeah I did record that with a camera :sweating: that's why it's shit quality. I am saving up to buy a proper mic. And yes that beat is excellent, in fact the whole mash-up album is brilliant I presume you've listened to it?. Thanks again for the feedback, hopefully I'll get that mic soon and up the quality and the rapping.
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Re: Crimson And Clover

Postby Solace » Aug 28th, '11, 19:04

I haven't honestly got a clue what album it is, you got a link for it or something? :o
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Re: Crimson And Clover

Postby Oguchi » Aug 28th, '11, 19:57

I'll PM you the link (I presume you're not allowed post links in posts?).
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Re: Crimson And Clover

Postby Eedee » Aug 28th, '11, 20:10

That beat is amazing. The lyrics were good just the quality needs to be improved. :y:

Sounds like you have a good voice for rap though. Just a quality mic and it'll do wonders!

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Re: Crimson And Clover

Postby Oguchi » Aug 28th, '11, 21:17

Thanks for the feedback, as I said I'm putting a side a bit of money for a mic. I'll have a look at your work now. :y:
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