.::Let You Go (Feat. D.Dubs)::.

[Tash8]

.::Let You Go (Feat. D.Dubs)::.
Listen / Download:
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http://www.zshare.net/audio/708956694fc67c74/

All criticism is very much appreciated!

Lyrics:
sifting thru facebook i'm looking at our pictures
those days are long gone but they still feel perfect
i wish it'd go back to the way that it was
when things were so easy but the day has come
to say goodbye and to let you go
though I still love you it's best that you know
i'll be here when you decide to come back
when the time feels right and we really want that
a day wont pass by where i dont think of you
the pain that's inside won't never let me to
12 am and I couldn't go to sleep
I needed to see you, I needed to feel
like I wasn't alone so i opened my drawer
grabbed my prom pictures, man it feels so far
so far away, so far away
lost in the day , so far away

cause baby I miss you and this what it's come to
another track saying that I still want you
cause I feel it's be dumb to, throw what we had
but i'm letting you go just know that we can
eventually get back and make up somehow
evnetaully get back and make up somehow
wake up one day and make up, not now
eventaully get back and make up some how


I speed to let you know, that I feel that it can work
tell my why not whats a reason that it wont
believe me when i say, that your all that I want
they can call me dumb but I still won't give you up
naw, not a chance in hell, maybe not now
when we're all settled down, who's stoppin us then
if you really don't want me, no need to pretend
but i know that you do, because you said it yourself
you said you'd never find anybody else like me
and finding someone like you, it's very much unlikely
and to prove it you, i have made you a song
but then you turned around and you broke my heart
i told i'd forgive you, but for now break up
then i'd finally wake up and then we'd get back
not saying right now but i really want you back
yea I really want you back, really want you back

if I had one chance to see her face,
and I won’t she wanted her space,
but I’ll give it time until I’m not the one this girl hates
I won’t be bashful, when she lets the past go,
I will call her up when she is tired of the assholes,
be right back to the way I thought, the way I saw I was taught,
to treat em like they should be treated,
this girls one of a kind, and when some things get heated,
one thing is on my mind, we had some firsts together,
we’ve seen the worst together...
O shit wait a minute, everything I did-you didn’t,
but we’re together now, and it’s not for long, I’m so much better since you’re thinkin
there is nothing’s wrong, so I will be here,
until the times come, for me ta be fair,
look what I’ve done, I’ve became the man you needed
when I wasn’t what you wanted
so I’ll hurt you like you hurt me when it started
ain’t it somethin, let the sleepless nights begin as you lay in bed singin…

[Slim Zaddy]

ya beat is sick man i liked it ,, lyrics are fire, so emotional,, and da beat suits dats. mixing is good i liked it ,,, but i did'nt like da way you flow on your first verse,, in the sec verse you were better and in da third verse it's fire, ,, mostly for me da best verse is the last, hook is amazing ,, i liked it ,,, over all it's great song, i liked it 8/10 ,, keep it up Tash

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

see tash that was i was talkin about...D.Dubs flowed better cuz he had more syllables..like he's word hit a hi-hat real quick then went on...and yours didnt really...your's was stretched over the hi-hats which doesnt sounds exciting(couldnt find another word now)...like you said once you wasnt really up-beat....i still can see you re-worked on it....and the mixing was way better this time....
your hook and D.Dubs's verse were A+ ....without hate..your verses pulled the track down..heavily ...but lyrical it was okay so far...saw no bigger flaws on the lyrics..
just my opinion

[Tash8]

see tash that was i was talkin about...D.Dubs flowed better cuz he had more syllables..like he's word hit a hi-hat real quick then went on...and yours didnt really...your's was stretched over the hi-hats which doesnt sounds exciting(couldnt find another word now)...like you said once you wasnt really up-beat....i still can see you re-worked on it....and the mixing was way better this time....
your hook and D.Dubs's verse were A+ ....without hate..your verses pulled the track down..heavily ...but lyrical it was okay so far...saw no bigger flaws on the lyrics..
just my opinion

i understnad, i wanted to do my verses like this kinda wanted to change it up a bit...

thx though

[Emadyville]

ya beat is sick man i liked it ,, lyrics are fire, so emotional,, and da beat suits dats. mixing is good i liked it ,,, but i did'nt like da way you flow on your first verse,, in the sec verse you were better and in da third verse it's fire, ,, mostly for me da best verse is the last, hook is amazing ,, i liked it ,,, over all it's great song, i liked it 8/10 ,, keep it up Tash

Thanks for the feed, and thank you as well chris

[Slim Zaddy]

ya beat is sick man i liked it ,, lyrics are fire, so emotional,, and da beat suits dats. mixing is good i liked it ,,, but i did'nt like da way you flow on your first verse,, in the sec verse you were better and in da third verse it's fire, ,, mostly for me da best verse is the last, hook is amazing ,, i liked it ,,, over all it's great song, i liked it 8/10 ,, keep it up Tash

Thanks for the feed, and thank you as well chris

i did'tn know ,, you were in da last verse lol , is your name is d.dubs , anyway ,, sick verse man ,, i liked it

[Emadyville]

i did'tn know ,, you were in da last verse lol , is your name is d.dubs , anyway ,, sick verse man ,, i liked it

Yeah that's me, that's my rap name, altho I know most people on here know me as emadyville

[Slim Zaddy]

i did'tn know ,, you were in da last verse lol , is your name is d.dubs , anyway ,, sick verse man ,, i liked it

Yeah that's me, that's my rap name, altho I know most people on here know me as emadyville

ya to be honest ,,, by da way , i'm waitin for somethin , emotional from ya ,, you always rocks, at dat...

[Emadyville]

ya to be honest ,,, by da way , i'm waitin for somethin , emotional from ya ,, you always rocks, at dat...

I got a song featuring DelinQuent that is coming soon


Bump

[Tash8]

bump, damn no feed for this

[Tash8]

bump, damn no feed for this

[Emadyville]

bump, damn no feed for this

[Mr. Chambers]

ok d.dubs......wasn't bad.....the rhyme scheme was weird but it worked......liked the content.....was pretty solid all around...


tash...i'ma be real with you...your flow is really really shakey.....you gotta work on keeping your syllables on lock....cuz you stretch them...and then rush them....and all that just to stay on flow it makes you sounds like your fighting with the beat instead of actually letting it flow....just let it come through....you got unneeded words sometimes.....work on your writing tech.

with all that being said...i will say this...you prolly have the most potential outta everyone i hear on here....and i'm really interested in how well your going to use people's feedback to improve....cuz you def got something different about your style...and tbh your hooks are pretty good....prolly one of the better hook writers on here...if you'd only lock down your flow....you'd be set.....

nice beat too..i dunno if you made it...but its sick...

overall...just keep working on the flow dunny.....you'll step it up......i can see it in your songs..just gotta let that flow come to you and you'll be pretty dam good

[Emadyville]

Thanks for the thorough feedback chambers, when he gets back I know he'll appreciate it too

[Tash8]

tash...i'ma be real with you...your flow is really really shakey.....you gotta work on keeping your syllables on lock....cuz you stretch them...and then rush them....and all that just to stay on flow it makes you sounds like your fighting with the beat instead of actually letting it flow....just let it come through....you got unneeded words sometimes.....work on your writing tech.

with all that being said...i will say this...you prolly have the most potential outta everyone i hear on here....and i'm really interested in how well your going to use people's feedback to improve....cuz you def got something different about your style...and tbh your hooks are pretty good....prolly one of the better hook writers on here...if you'd only lock down your flow....you'd be set.....

thank you bro, i get what your saying...and you'll notice the improvement soon i promise... about the hook shit, yeah man I take pride in making my hooks, you can ask vettori...me and him been closely workin on how to make hooks work and you'll see that soon in our work! that's another promise haha

thanks a lot for being honest with it man