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Re: Coleon & Anonymous - Untitled

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 24th, '10, 19:46

I only read your verse Co...Annon makes me bored...I liked what I saw..good structure and crazy multis...dope piece...50 percent of it at least :shifty:
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Re: Coleon & Anonymous - Untitled

Postby DƎRDYPK » Jan 24th, '10, 19:49

pretty dope stuff :y: :b:
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Re: Coleon & Anonymous - Untitled

Postby DƎRDYPK » Jan 24th, '10, 19:52

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Re: Coleon & Anonymous - Untitled

Postby Relapse.LP » Jan 24th, '10, 19:53

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:rock: :rock: :rock: :rock: :rock: :rock: :rock: :rock: :rock: :rock: :rock:

:laughing: :laughing: :laughing: :laughing: :laughing:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/

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Re: Coleon & Anonymous - Untitled

Postby Relapse.LP » Jan 24th, '10, 20:13

@ Anon's verse: You brought the usual heat. Real entertaining read and it got some clever lines throughout. Overall, you've done better, but it was still dope. :smoking:

@ Cole's verse: It was surprisingly great. Didn't really have any clever wordplay, which is your focal point, but the vocabulary and the multies was dope. And it had some humor in it too. :laughing:

Collaborate, hand Anon a plate
The ripper’s apprentice meets the syllable tank

^ My favorite line... Made me crack up for some reason, but it was great. ^

Overall 8.5/10. :y: :y:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
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Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/

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Re: Coleon & Anonymous - Untitled

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 24th, '10, 20:21

Am actually listenin to mic club right now lmao.
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Coleon & Anonymous - Untitled

Postby Solace » Jan 25th, '10, 00:48

What the fuck man

I told you this was MY verse

so

Fuck you FaQ
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Re: Coleon & Anonymous - Untitled

Postby Solace » Jan 25th, '10, 00:53

I mistook your original pm for "you me and anon should collab"

and after i said "anonymous accepted" i put my verse then said "my verse"

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Re: Coleon & Solace - Still Untitled

Postby Solace » Jan 25th, '10, 00:57

The more dopeness the merrier. :sweating:

Sorry for the mixup dude, but dope ass verse :y:
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Re: Coleon & Solace - Still Untitled

Postby Spyder » Jan 25th, '10, 01:58

i was wonderin wtf peeps were talkin about Anon on this i was like huh?

god shit from both of you, not your best nothing that made me drop my jaw
but still great none the less
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Re: Coleon & Solace - Still Untitled

Postby Banks » Jan 25th, '10, 02:11

I dont like it
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Re: Coleon & Solace - Still Untitled

Postby Spyder » Jan 25th, '10, 02:12

therealbanks wrote:I dont like it


y dont u post a piece then :smoking:
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Re: Coleon & Solace - Still Untitled

Postby Banks » Jan 25th, '10, 02:16

Spyder wrote:
therealbanks wrote:I dont like it


y dont u post a piece then :smoking:

I have to like it? Let me answer: No! :smoking:
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Re: Coleon & Solace - Still Untitled

Postby Spyder » Jan 25th, '10, 02:33

that what i thought

and no you just didnt post a reason so how am i supposed to know you know what your talking about
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Re: Coleon & Solace - Still Untitled

Postby Relapse.LP » Jan 25th, '10, 02:46

Spyder wrote:that what i thought

and no you just didnt post a reason so how am i supposed to know you know what your talking about

The fuck's in your avatar, Spy? :laughing:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
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Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/

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