M.pyre *get at it* new song

[M-Pyre]

sup guys, got something new I just made. i's mainly about the beat at the moment so don't mind the verse to much, I wrote it pretty quick.

song:
http://www.zshare.net/audio/726690172f2e5fc7/


still needs to be mixed properly, but any feedback is appreciated, and will be returned.

[DelinQuent]

flow is nice, stays on beat nicely.

lyrics sound too much like eminem with the random violence towards odd people.

delivery is a bit weak, there's really no oomph to your voice. if you're not into it, how am i supposed to be?

overall not bad tho, the lyrics, while being eminemish, were good (and i'm not much into lyrical songs). flow was near perfect. good job man.

[GoodGirlsGetGutted]

Not bad. It sounds strange when the vocals come in out of nowhere and there's a little too much buildup in the beat. The lyrics and flow were superb.