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Dear God III

Postby gutawafang » Feb 26th, '10, 01:22

God, once again, I apologize for being a bad existence
I admit it’s been ignorance, it’s been negligence
Never did I think I needed you, I neglected you
Handed me chances, but then I rejected you
Why are you always there? No, I shan’t question you
Being the suppressant whenever I felt emotional
Being the hand taking away the knives I gripped
Blowing away the demons in the nights I sleep
You promise you’d always be there for me?
Replenish the stock in the air for me?
Forehead on the ground, I ask once more
Forgiveness please, I don’t ask for more
Would you take my hand?
Would you accept my confessions?
Can loving you change anything?
Dear God, I’ve learned my lesson
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Re: Dear God III

Postby GoodGirlsGetGutted » Feb 26th, '10, 01:42

I see how the trilogy has come full circle.

This is stronger than II.

Good stuff, we need more spiritual writing here.
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Re: Dear God III

Postby Just Silver » Feb 26th, '10, 01:46

short but powerful poetic feeling to it

works well gotta check out the other 2 right now :y:

i cant seem to find them tho :angry:
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Re: Dear God III

Postby gutawafang » Feb 27th, '10, 07:45

GoodGirlsGetGutted wrote:I see how the trilogy has come full circle.

This is stronger than II.

Good stuff, we need more spiritual writing here.

:worship: :worship: :worship:

Really? Thanks man. :worship:

Just Silver wrote:short but powerful poetic feeling to it

works well gotta check out the other 2 right now :y:

i cant seem to find them tho :angry:

:sweating: Yeah, thanks for checking it out man. :worship:
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Re: Dear God III

Postby Solace » Mar 2nd, '10, 01:26

Would you take my hand?
Would you accept my confessions?
Can loving you change anything?
Dear God, I’ve learned my lesson


The ending was purely beautiful. A nice piece.

Why are you always there? No, I shan’t question you


Aha. :y:
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Re: Dear God III

Postby gutawafang » Mar 2nd, '10, 01:28

Solace wrote:
Would you take my hand?
Would you accept my confessions?
Can loving you change anything?
Dear God, I’ve learned my lesson


The ending was purely beautiful. A nice piece.

Why are you always there? No, I shan’t question you


Aha. :y:

Thanks a lot Solace. :flower:
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