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Ruthless - In Trouble

Postby Tranquil » May 3rd, '10, 10:17

Ok...ok.. this is the first time that i have written/recorded in about a month :o so if the flow is a little sloppy you know why.. Take a listen and give some feedback, and if you have a track you want me to feed, just drop a link, and i will do it ;)

Link: http://limelinx.com/files/3e1e660f7941f ... af9a1bd6fa

Chores: (x2)
im in trouble and i need to get out coz im,
(in...tro..uble)
i talk my self into things that i cant get out coz im,
(in...tro..uble)

Verse 1:
everything just seems get worse and worse,
im never ending, till the day i get in my hurse,
and i try to do good, but it backfires on me,
i fixed the engin under the hood, and she dumped me,
we aint even friends anymore, we parted ways,
and theres nothing that i want more, to see her pretty face,
but that aint ever happnin so im thinking of the memories,
smiling at the fun we had in the good old days,
and im just sitting in my room, a depressed slump,
to tired to move, so i sit in front of my comp,
and i havnt even written a song in ages,
the last track i did two words long, and zero pages,
and im sinking into this dark whole of quick sand,
lost my job, lost my home and im livin in a tent,
what am i gonna do for the rest of my life,
all i no is that i dont no, on my knees praying to christ,

Verse 2:
ive done everything, and ive tried every solution,
but nothing fucking works coz im stuck in this olution,
when am i gonna get out and conqour the fucking world,
follow my dreams and maybe find the one and only girl,
this is the track to get it all out, and leave it all behind,
coz i dont want to be stuck with this always in my mind,
and all this time, it has been weighing in on my brain,
never commited a crime, but im going slowly insane,
and im a nice person, and im gonna start to show it,
and im always cursing, if you knew me you would no it,
and i dont mean harm on everything that i say,
i could walk up to a gay person and say that he is gay,
thats just me, i say it how it is and nothing else,
and if you agree, i love you, like you nothing else,
and i have come to far in my music to let it all go,
and im getting hella-dope, and lots of spitting to go,
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Re: Ruthless - In Trouble

Postby gutawafang » May 3rd, '10, 10:22

Chorus is good but could be harmonized better. :y:

Some words are spelt wrong. :sweating:

Flow is actually good man.

The lyrics all were pretty good. Multis helped a lot. :y:
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Re: Ruthless - In Trouble

Postby Tranquil » May 3rd, '10, 10:24

gutawafang wrote:Chorus is good but could be harmonized better. :y:

Some words are spelt wrong. :sweating:

Flow is actually good man.

The lyrics all were pretty good. Multis helped a lot. :y:

thanks man :flower: and yes i no some words are spelt wrong, haha, but it dosnt matter to me, as-long as i can read the word, then its all good, haha
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Re: Ruthless - In Trouble

Postby JBM » May 3rd, '10, 11:35

Hook is cool. It has a original sound to it.
The flow I didnt enjoy but it was on point most the time.
Lyrics and delivery were good for most part as well.


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Re: Ruthless - In Trouble

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » May 3rd, '10, 11:54

flow is very stretching if you know what i mean?
somewhat of sloppy...and tbh its no exuse that you didnt record in a month anywayz
i like the delivery...shows some potential..just some more voice control here and there
lyrics are nice...got nuttin to complain...
and i dont mind the wrong spelling..i mean i would do it too but then people would blame my accent or some shit..but thats another story....
its an allright track...flow was lazy on here and voice control was everywhere but on point....
thats the only things i can complain about.
hook was nice as most of your hooks :y:
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Re: Ruthless - In Trouble

Postby Tranquil » May 3rd, '10, 12:03

°[~CHR!$~]° wrote:flow is very stretching if you know what i mean?
somewhat of sloppy...and tbh its no exuse that you didnt record in a month anywayz
i like the delivery...shows some potential..just some more voice control here and there
lyrics are nice...got nuttin to complain...
and i dont mind the wrong spelling..i mean i would do it too but then people would blame my accent or some shit..but thats another story....
its an allright track...flow was lazy on here and voice control was everywhere but on point....
thats the only things i can complain about.
hook was nice as most of your hooks :y:

thanks man, and yeah im gonna get down and work on my flows alot more now.. and thanks for the in deph feedback, i appreciate it :happy:
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Re: Ruthless - In Trouble

Postby youngfire420 » May 6th, '10, 01:56

Link is down :(
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Re: Ruthless - In Trouble

Postby Tranquil » May 6th, '10, 09:26

^^ im re-upping it :happy:
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Re: Ruthless - In Trouble

Postby youngfire420 » May 6th, '10, 19:19

The file you were looking for could not be found:

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* The file was removed by LimeLinx because it infringed our Terms of Service.

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