so i was seein how the outside world feels.. any suggestions or help would be greatly appreciated.

this is the new version including a second verse...better quality as well!!
http://www.zshare.net/audio/7693095430def625/
lyrics:
It's been a long time commin, but I never stop runnin
shoes won't stop smokin better get a mop bucket
and I don't mean to sound anti-social,
but what about the "I can't decide" hopefuls
adding up bills makes you feel so remorseful
especially when you finish and can't afford the total
Bandit on the Mu'Fuckin Mic and I got a appetite for rappin right
bitches on my dick takin rabid bites and if they ask the price
I make 'em ask it twice, then wear a mask at night
and slash and slice, cuz i'm not lookin for a plastic wife
this planet isn't savage enough, to contain me you need canons and guns
I'm just havin some fun, and you actin as if you actually won
This is blasphemy, you're academically nun (none)
My math and similies cause massive hemorrhaging
especially when they act symmetrically to one
god damnit I just do it so fluid, I soak it
and keep on floatin like a boat in the ocean
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I met a bad bitch, and i fucked her too
sex on the mattress, her mouth got screwed
felt so relaxin, i put her in the mood.
till she got too wet and her eyes turned blue.
so whatchu gonna say and whatchu gonna do
when your creepin in the house and the locks undo
a freak in the bed, and your stuck like glue
your girl walked in, her best friend too
your dicks still hard, and your life got screwed
thinkin with your penis never felt so good
and I don't wanna be the main source of a pain
stay away, get away take it the same
sit back, relax, keep playin ya game
the faith that i had on the plain to ya pad
makin love and makin up was all that we had
the situation is sad the confrontation is bad
i guess when this is over the salutation is glad
to end this conversation with a pen and a pad
gimme back the sex, all the cum that u swallowed
stick my dick in ya mouth and suck it till it's hollowed
teach you how to follow everyword that is sour,
how it powers in ya coochie every half an hour
suck on ya pussy even stuck it in ya tushy
the sex is unruly, so fuck, suck, just do me
(I know it doesn't have the greatest quality, mostly cuz of the mic I have but if u can offer tips as to how to help make it sound better without buyin a new mic it'd be appreciated!!)
thanks guys, and I'll return the favor if anyone asks.