Poorly written lines

[HairJordan23]

Most of the 1st verse in Talkin 2 Myself. Too corny and simple. Concept-wise, its great, but poorly written nonetheless.

u must be talking about the Wayne and Ye stuff. It's honest. I know 50 thinks like that and other rappers do too. They hate on people who are on top. I thought that song was written almost perfectly. Maybe he shouldn't have admitted that and especially the "I would've had my azz handed to me" bullsh1t, but oh well.

[Elision]

Shit, for the amount of breath-taking lines on the album, I could care less if the guy made a full track that was just him slurring random shit.

[Devil'sAdvocate]

Half of Not Afraid feel's corny to me and very poorly written especiall the bean's line.

[MinM]

about double "even": i thought it was "especially when you can't even write a decent punchline, even you (!) 're lying to yourself".

[dR3]

about double "even": i thought it was "especially when you can't even write a decent punchline, even you (!) 're lying to yourself".

lol never saw it that way, thanks!

[Chromie]

Half of Not Afraid feel's corny to me and very poorly written especiall the bean's line.

I happen to like the beans line...a lot of folks say "fuck em and feed em beans" or "fuck em and feed em fish heads & hope they choke on a bone" when talking about somebody constantly bitching about what you do, so why would he not say "fuck the world, feed it beans, its gassed up if it thinks its stoppin me" if that's what he actually means?

@HairJordan, I actually think its great that he openly admitted he was not on his game and would've had his ass handed to him. We all know he was pretty jacked & it would've been a big death for him had he taken on that lyric war and lost it. One of the things I love about Em is the fact that he will smash somebody that says shit about him, like The Warning...genius. On top of his game he can not be touched in a lyric war.

The "for better or worse, he's married to the game, like a fuck you for Christmas, his gift is a curse" line. Love this line...like getting nothing for Christmas (literally), his lyrical genius (gift) gets him no love from the industry (curse). Not hard to decipher.

[MikeNUFC]

You ruined it now, I hope you can't sleep and you dream about it.
And when you dream, I hope you can't sleep and you scream about it.

Awful, that. Em even changed it in the live version with Elton, so he must have realised.

[Hadez]

about double "even": i thought it was "especially when you can't even write a decent punchline, even you (!) 're lying to yourself".

that's a possibility. he ends a line with words that run into the second quite a bit.

[Jaz]

You ruined it now, I hope you can't sleep and you dream about it.
And when you dream, I hope you can't sleep and you scream about it.

Awful, that. Em even changed it in the live version with Elton, so he must have realised.

I can't believe I've never noticed this. Shows me how much of an educated listener I was when that album came out lmao.

Wish his old stuff was just now getting released so I could REALLY appreciate it to the fullest.

[Solace]

You ruined it now, I hope you can't sleep and you dream about it.
And when you dream, I hope you can't sleep and you scream about it.

Awful, that. Em even changed it in the live version with Elton, so he must have realised.

What did he change it to

[Heffernan]

like a fuck your for christmas, his gift is a curse...i hate that line

and i just wanna say

im a boss, i just wanna get that across, even my dentist hates when i floss..i hate that too...the only way i would like it is if...he made a white trash party video..and dressed up as rick ross for that line haha

[Scrubz]

The line in WBd about the extension chord... Reminded me of the bad parts of relapse.

[shadyboymez]

You ruined it now, I hope you can't sleep and you dream about it.
And when you dream, I hope you can't sleep and you scream about it.

Awful, that. Em even changed it in the live version with Elton, so he must have realised.

or ... when you dream, you dream that you cannot sleep and are screaming?

[MackBook]

Shit, for the amount of breath-taking lines on the album, I could care less if the guy made a full track that was just him slurring random shit.

This.

This has been an amazing album with a lot of witty punchlines and metaphors we aren't really used to hearing from Em for a long time. So if he had a Fack part 2 as a bonus track with Recovery, I wouldnt mind

[GenePeer]

You ruined it now, I hope you can't sleep and you dream about it.
And when you dream, I hope you can't sleep and you scream about it.

Awful, that. Em even changed it in the live version with Elton, so he must have realised.

haha...i remember listening to Stan the first days, and wondering what exactly Em was saying