battle for recognition exclusive tr verse (check this)

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so here's a unreleased verse for a track with a mc called Nitty Grittz, hes a pretty big rapper up heer, we have been trying to work with the big underground guys up heer (loki, respek ba ect.) so hopefully doing something with nitty will open up more doors, couple of people were commenting on my watere'd down style, so heers something to keep your minds open then bar still kicks underground

http://www.zshare.net/audio/79442911151e1370/


rough version of the verse, it will be studio done before it hits the album.

till the place i get im winning im just battling for recogition
when i get the heads a spinning open minds like legs of wimmen
im really timid till i open up and fight first
leave your dead weight travelling in a light herse
there so cheap giving nothing like a tight purse
im tryna open up gates while i just write words
the complications that i face coz im just from this nation
leaves me like a dead surgeon man, no patiants
im comtiplating concentrating on the constant hating
but when that constalation moves theres star waiting
so im just raking in the time till the buzz blows
so if you toy with my story you'll get bloody knoes
started of a raging contest were is jsut paging nonsense
im back and saying honest i am heer to take the honours
so fuck anyone whos missed my scene
im heer clean this shit up like i was mister sheen

[ChinaShopTaurus]

The surgeon/patients line has been used to death. Delete it that verse would be alot better.

[Steve Spag]

Sounds good man; I'm not gonna comment on the quality 'cause like you said it's just a rough verse, but lyrics and all that were great! Your pronunciation at some points I think could be better, but overall I'd say this is a pretty strong verse and I'm sure you're gonna body whoever else is on the track with you.

Keep it up bro!

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The surgeon/patients line has been used to death. Delete it that verse would be alot better.

yeh im aware but i think it goes in nice with the structure thats why i used it, depending on your knowledge of hip hop and how vast of artists you listen to, every wordplay has been used to death so its irrelevent, there's probly alot of people who'll listen to it and hadnt heard it get used in the way before, there will be people who have heard it so much they are like "mehh" when it comes in ya know, one of those catch 22's of using wordplay and punches in rap no matter how you do it it will always have been done before lol thanks for the feedback

Sounds good man; I'm not gonna comment on the quality 'cause like you said it's just a rough verse, but lyrics and all that were great! Your pronunciation at some points I think could be better, but overall I'd say this is a pretty strong verse and I'm sure you're gonna body whoever else is on the track with you.

Keep it up bro!

thanks man, yeh ill re-do this and work on little slips heer and there. and nah man nitty will kill this track.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AVXttYqDb8g

his newest track, guys dope

[B.A.D.]

never please everyone and the best route to success is to just be you.

I agree

it definitively helps... beacuse the world is too full of people who want to please, and still needs the reality within a person, its one of the little things hip hop has that makes you unique from the rest. which is yourself.... do what you really want to do... the more you enjoy it, believe me that listeners will enjoy it more.