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"Unknown" Emadyville (D. Dubs)

Postby Emadyville » Sep 17th, '10, 05:37

New track I did, feedback appreciated :y:

http://www.myspace.com/ddubswinch

http://drop.io/z7cseas/asset/unknown-mp3

So I’m sitting by my lonesome, alone some,
checking for a girl so I phone one hoping for a homerun,
and I don’t mean that slut or this slut,
I switched up, in disgust thinking what we discussed,
what I mean is only if she picks up,
but it’s fucked, I didn’t mean to disrupt,
yeah check it I’m back to wreck it,
and misrepresent what it is you respected,
see I’m back to write the darkest shit,
so I start this envisioning a carcass lit,
and it’s marvelous, see the spark and spit,
and it’s arsenic, how’d I harvest this?
Well I harbored it and kept going with that,
and when I saw the lit match, well I harnessed it,
yeah I’m back to send the world this in thoroughness,
and it’s almost as amazing as when two girls kiss…

Hook:
I know you all missed me, like I missed you,
but I’m here so this shouldn’t be an issue,
Just know I gotta lot to sift through,
so sit back and relax or I’m bound to diss you,
And you don’t want that right after my comeback,
not that I think that you’d even write a come back,
so just know I’m going for gusto,
yeah it’s cutthroat, and you’re unknown…

If you thought I was told to chill,
know I’m cold as ice and twice folded still,
and I don’t even rhyme I suppose it’s ill,
to bulldoze and kill and just, go at will,
so I don’t gotta flow you should know it’s still,
as the target moves I just wrote for thrills,
I said it’s cutthroat see it’s dope until,
a real throat gets cut and blood goes to spill,
I do it for the sport,
I do it for the fourth of you who support the three fourths of you,
that never gave shit so I’m forced to do,
what I’ve done right here and on a course anew,
until I’m horse and blue,
I wait to be judged when the courts are due, and the jury in,
I’ll give an injury till the gurney spins,
it’s my life in a journal let the journey begin…

I guess I’m just a misfit,
and I missed this,
did this even spark your interest, you dipshits,
I am back to lift this,
to pick this up cause it’s more of a gift it’s,
not a picnic it’s life intrinsic,
despite what you like I will write to finish,
I will write till I diminish in a sentence,
relentless as critics,
so I really I meant this shit it’s,
like a storm to inform the weak,
that as a norm I speak here to warn the bleak,
that I been there, plead the fifth I’m in gear,
to sincere-ly reappear then disappear,
yeah it’s magic I grab her to murder,
haven’t you heard a abbra cadaver,
yeah it’s funny so laugh at, that rap,
but it’s only a joke, if I back track…
Menzo wrote:Its cuz you're dope and Daddy Dubs. No one fucks with that


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Re: "Unknown" Emadyville (D. Dubs)

Postby Weather Man » Sep 17th, '10, 07:19

This goes hard homie, not really digging the beat, but the chorus is fucking sick. :worship:
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Re: "Unknown" Emadyville (D. Dubs)

Postby dR3 » Sep 17th, '10, 12:18

Excellent track, I like the beat, it fits the content perfectly. Flow was on point, your swag was on a high level too. :shifty:

Great vocab, and the multies don't seem forced at all.

Mixing can be a bit better tho.



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Re: "Unknown" Emadyville (D. Dubs)

Postby Emadyville » Sep 17th, '10, 19:48

It's really appreciated guys thanks :y:
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Re: "Unknown" Emadyville (D. Dubs)

Postby mcZu » Sep 17th, '10, 21:35

The beat is hype as fuck, I like it. Flow is great, delivery is ok, lyrics are great. The hook was dope too, awesome song bro, you outdid yourself on this one.
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Re: "Unknown" Emadyville (D. Dubs)

Postby Emadyville » Sep 17th, '10, 21:43

mcZu wrote:The beat is hype as fuck, I like it. Flow is great, delivery is ok, lyrics are great. The hook was dope too, awesome song bro, you outdid yourself on this one.


damn, thank you man. I really appreciate it a lot :y:
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Re: "Unknown" Emadyville (D. Dubs)

Postby Emadyville » Sep 20th, '10, 19:08

damn, thanks a lot man, really appreciated :worship:
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Re: "Unknown" Emadyville (D. Dubs)

Postby DelinQuent » Sep 20th, '10, 22:44

this was dope.

the rhyming, as usual, up to par, that means it's phenomenal.

the flow was spot on, i didn't hear it fall off even one time. delivery was nice, i felt the attitude of the song, this was above your average in the delivery department.

hook, while it wasn't terrible, it didn't spark my interest. it didn't hurt the song at all though.

overall 8.5/10, dope.
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Re: "Unknown" Emadyville (D. Dubs)

Postby Steve Spag » Sep 21st, '10, 01:25

Wow man, you're really killing it these days! The last 2 tracks I've heard from you were written/executed extremely well, and this track, well, is no exception. Your flow is marvelous and delivery is remarkable....you're shittin' on these wannabes!

Dope track brotha, keep it up!
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Re: "Unknown" Emadyville (D. Dubs)

Postby Tash8 » Sep 21st, '10, 01:34

Steve Spag wrote:Wow man, you're really killing it these days! The last 2 tracks I've heard from you were written/executed extremely well, and this track, well, is no exception. Your flow is marvelous and delivery is remarkable....you're shittin' on these wannabes!

Dope track brotha, keep it up!
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greAT job on this song
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Re: "Unknown" Emadyville (D. Dubs)

Postby Emadyville » Sep 21st, '10, 04:02

thanks dq, spag, and tash, again it's greatly appreciated.

and ima be hitting a real studio next week so this shit will sound a lot better, i might even redo this song there :y:
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Re: "Unknown" Emadyville (D. Dubs)

Postby B.A.D. » Sep 21st, '10, 04:06

damn, that drop.io site is weird hahaha. but it works :y:

damn, on this one you sound a lot like one dude from the outzidaz, I dont know who exactly. but damn, great ass flow. yeah, what I liked the best was the flow, the hook is great aswell and nice rhymes, funny punches. Verse 1 & 2 were crazy great, verse 3 a little below them, but non-the-less good stuff. I like the whole vibe. great great improvement from you. now its time to work on that quality, and make it flawless.

excelent drop man :worship:

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Re: "Unknown" Emadyville (D. Dubs)

Postby Emadyville » Sep 21st, '10, 04:09

^ thanks a lot man, I appreciate that. yeah i might redo this song at the studio and get it real tight.

i'ma return that feed in a few man :y:
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Re: "Unknown" Emadyville (D. Dubs)

Postby Devil'sAdvocate » Sep 22nd, '10, 12:56

that was iight,beat was meh. :y:
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Re: "Unknown" Emadyville (D. Dubs)

Postby Emadyville » Sep 23rd, '10, 03:37

Devil'sAdvocate wrote:that was iight,beat was meh. :y:


I can't tell if you liked it, but thanks for checking it out :y:
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