I just dropped a verse for 'Camaro' in Rap Battles

[WakeUpShow]

Can you guys check it out and give me some feedback. Where I can improve. where i absolutely suck. which parts are decent? I'm doing this because i feel like only a few ppl would see it if i didn't do this

[WakeUpShow]

i sad

[tjb]

i read it. not bad... your rhymes need to be said like perfectly for it to sound like a rhyme at all.. ( just some) and seems like your tryna put too many rhymes per line, so theres to many syllables, but good start

[WakeUpShow]

i read it. not bad... your rhymes need to be said like perfectly for it to sound like a rhyme at all.. ( just some) and seems like your tryna put too many rhymes per line, so theres to many syllables, but good start

thanks for the feedback. what did you think of my chinese grocery line haha